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You Vowed

You vowed
To never cheat
You always promised me

Sadly was
Your biggest lie
Leaving me crushed 

Neath your deceit

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  • amysticwriter silver member
    July 18
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    Hi Rob...nine write...mystic


  • Sandygram silver member
    July 15

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    Touches The Heart

    A very heartfelt poem my friend. Deceit from a loved one is always so hurtful. For what is left if we don't have trust.
    A GREAT poem and one I can and many others can relate to.

    Hugs and smiles, Sandy

    • faderman1959
      July 17
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      A common theme it seems these days sadly sandy. You are right , when the trust is gone what is left? Thanks for visiting!


  • Riftkin gold member
    July 15

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    Words of promise broken, leaves the one lost and the other full of pain and sadness, your words have shown that here.

    Riftkin


    • faderman1959
      July 17
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      Thanks Riftkin. Sadly promises seem to be all to easy to break. They carry no weight anymore it seems.


  • DeJaBlue gold member
    July 15

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    Broken vows are never pretty. Powerful words here, my friend. Best wishes to you, always.


    • faderman1959
      July 17
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      Thanks blue! If only the promises spoken were as strong eh. There would be alot less pain in the world.

  • phoenixonfire
    July 14
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    a painful feeling that scars one forever..wonderfully inviting


  • Jesann gold member
    June 19
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    Cheating & lies..devastate.

    Trust forever compromised.

    Well done


  • Zombiefreak13
    June 18
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    ugh its a sickening feeling when you find out everything they'd ever told you was a lie...

  • SleepyShelly
    June 15

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    I hate cheaters! They always ruin everything! lol Short and simple and straight to the point! I love it, just like anything else I have read by you. I don't know if you remember me or not, but a few years ago, we became friends on here always leaving comments for each other, well the last few years I have not really been able to write, the words just don't seem to be there anymore. I decided to come back here again and try to get the writers block taken care of lol...so check out my page sometime and let me know what you think!


  • Raspy
    June 15

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    Intense

    The raw emotion pours out of this in so few words.
    Sometimes we all make vows,we can't keep for one reason or another.Sometimes unintentionaly,but then,the damage is done.
    Forgiveness though is such a producer of magical miracles,and also very difficult to truly acquire.
    It surely is a divine gift.
    Enjoyed this very much!

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