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naked words and daisy chains

 

His fingertips poised in suspended animation,
in that curious hour between seconds,

until thoughts are sent from his racing mind,
erupting like molten lava on to pristine white
nothingness, as yet devoid of individuality's breath.

Agile language dances across lettered keys,
weaving naked words into daisy chains,
so fragile and enchanting, each held in place
with subtle wisps of punctuation.

He is the conductor of his own symphony,
the music of each heartbeat resonates,

effortlessly matching my own.
Set free, his poetic words rest easy,
knowing I will wake to find them

as they wrap me in their warm embrace.

I know these hands, I have felt their touch,
so passionate and tender, despite their beneficence.
They hold me even when distance
lies beyond the breadth of sensitivity's swirl.
I am drawn to them, they open and close
each morning and night, around my feminine form.

With a flick of his wrists, he chases away my fears.
I sit and watch them shatter into insignificance.
I have seen their strength slice the air around him,
watched the burnished shoots of grass

that dot their landscape, wave in rippled sensations

as they wait for his next command.


Side by side, they steal away attention
from the billowing fluctuations of my life,
leaving me mesmerised and loved.


How do these cosmic giants make contact
with all things, such whispered grace.
They have acquired many skills, from birth to now,
these two halves of a butterfly's wings.
I am forever captured by the strength and
tenderness of his cool, beautiful vessels.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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For indy - 143

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  • Ken-Maverick
    September 20

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    VIEWED

    "I know these hands, I have felt their touch,
    so passionate and tender, despite their beneficence.
    They hold me even when distance
    lies beyond the breadth of sensitivity's swirl.
    I am drawn to them, they open and close
    each morning and night, around my feminine form."
    This is just wowza!!!
    Thats all i'll say

    Ken

  • i love you and i know you love me too. stop being angry in your head and let me in? i know the drink is an issue, but rathern than condeming me each time i raise a beer, help me please? i will say it again, i have never met anyoe as beautiful as you in my life so even though we do cklash i do not want to lose you. i think you know this emotion. i love you even if sometimes i think you're a git as i am sure you think of me being thre same, but the fzct reamins - i love you.

  • mmm how beautiful... thanks for entering and good luck!

  • pulls out a rag - i just thought i would come and polish your silver for you, hope that is okay with you


  • Mr.
    June 29
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    Very well written.


  • Jfd
    June 21

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    this had a lovely ebb and flow feel to it, really great vocab. choices as well, you truly painted a beautiful picture with words, thanks for entering


  • Maggie Kay gold member
    June 19

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    a very nice well written piece full of great metaphors and similies
    keep it up
    kmp


  • Night Hope gold member
    June 17

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    "in that curious hour between seconds"

    Such a timeless penning this is, an instant classic. I can see why Ian was so pleased by your penning, Sweetie. Such gorgeous imagery, strewn throughout each line. I'm glad I saw this link on Nic's page, or I might have missed witnessing this beauty. Good luck in the contest, my Friend.



  • i love you


    • Mariana gold member
      June 18
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      I loved you yesterday
      I love you today
      I will love you always
      some things never change

  • oh, yeah, i nearly forgot to say - good luck in the contest let me feel your sole, yeah, it is a good fish now please peel some spuds.


  • parenchma
    June 16
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    I think him now a very happy puppy chasing his tail in happy circles!


  • Nicolette gold member
    June 16

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    I could feel the sincerity in this poem, the authenticity of voice, the love that seems to rise from every word, phrase and image, and that is something I so appreciate: to write from the pulse - I've found it in this poem. You've done well to capture the essence of what his hands, his touch means to you. I especially liked the imagas of the first stanza, the sense of anticipation before thoughts become words, and of course the closing lines...the softer images of butterfly wings. Really love poetry, soft and tender and romantic - as love should be! Thank you for guiding me here!

    ~ Nicolette


    • Mariana gold member
      June 17
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      Thank you Nicolette. I am really glad you liked this.


  • Daxteriana
    June 16

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    Wow. This was a great poem! Sensual romantic poetry is one of the best types on AP. That was really amazing to me and my heart.

    Daxteriana


  • zared
    June 16

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    I love this
    the sentiments are heartfelt

    'Agile language dances across lettered keys'
    and this is my favorite... a stand out line, for me


    zared

  • What an amazing piece of sensual romantic poetry heighrened to perfection leading one gently along the curves of love to rest in pillows of tenderness and sublime connection. A wonderful piece of poetry capturing the fullness of friendship with charasmatic style. Very seductive... beuatifully worded

  • I one four three thee - and you know that is the number of my door. And all those signs we have seen. A cheecky individual, and moods, and too many to mention my sweet, I know I am special needs, and forgive me if i have moods, but know this - I love you.

  • VERY Nice

    I feel every word you write as if coming from a deep well of love inside you.


  • Swangrnv gold member
    June 15

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    DAMN..

    You have floored me..I never saw this coming from your pen..wow..if i were him, i'd be a 'bowl of goo' right about now..


  • Cannonsfire
    June 15

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    Wonderful piece here hun, just loved the assonance it holds as you read it out loud C

  • Oh my this is just amazing! I was thinking you were writing this for and about someone in particular, but not too sure
    I just adore your second stanza. This is so brimful of wondrous imagery and beautiful thoughts. Very elegant indeed.
    Best wishes in the contest
    Gaylene

  • what a gorgeous write! I was drawn to every word, and it speaks volumes of beauty and elegance. Well done, very deserving to be placed. Good luck, M! billy

  • rippled sensations - aye to that, we all like to have a good old ripple in the name of love, and it's a candy chocolate bar too, come and unwrap me. a good piece of splendid poetry penned with fine curls of sensuality and individuality. your feminine form is a pool of beauty that shimmers in the reflection of poetry.

    good luck in the contest. it is a wonderful contest and i hope the contest holder thinks your poem worthy of gold in their contest - i really love contests, so much that i hold some contests myself but i never win those contests for i do not enter my own contests but i like to enter other people's contests and live in the spiralled hope that i win their contest. did i say i love contests? yay for contests - and by the way - a good poem which you have entered into a contest.

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