will love you still
when amoebas
drive speedboats
and always welcome
you with open spaces
and arms that race
to wrap you
like the cloak
of midnight
when you are clouds
and rain tears
my ground will soak
them up, my trees
tickling your underside
with upside down
fingers
when you are
blue sky
my sun will
shine bright on you
all Spring and Summer
laughing like rivers
that never stop
when you are Fall
and blown by winds
my Earth will anchor you
and hold you where
you will always belong,
rooted in me
forever
when you are birds
I will let you fly
and track
your migratory pattern
and be waiting for you
when you make
land fall
when you are stars
I will whisper prayers to you
and nothing will shine as bright
Author notes
Picture credit: Forbes Travel
A contest entry
- Find a muse in the beauty of Nature by thepoetssoul.
2250 points, ended June 20, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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A great feed through season and life. You are an easy writer to read and be entertained.
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Superb Plus
'tis a very fine write, indeed, with excellent imagery. You have expressed your thoughts quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us.
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hoew i love how you have shaped the infinte existence of the lover..loved one..through every possible incarnation..eternal and ever shifting and changing...and never once did you make it too obvious.
..beautiful..
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Yet a third time - speechless and awed.
This poem had a particular connection for me because of the way you used nature to portray the highs and lows of life (the rain clouds, the sunshine, the Autumn winds, etc.).
Your metaphors and imagery reminded me very much of my particular highs and lows, especially the Autumn winds...
How desperately I need someone who can anchor me while allowing me to cycle through those many phases unhindered.
It's an uneasy and odd position to be in and not many people are up to the task of giving a love like this - one that understands, forgives, allows space.
Wonderful write!
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I saw gold here ... this was really awesome
like a breeth of fresh air...♥♥
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This is a beautiful piece of poetry,
I'm very pleased with your entry.
Very lovely it truly embraces,
thanks for sharing.
Tony
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Personifying again, are you?
Fantastic job engaging the reader for all the things that poetry should bring;
detached, but lovingly asking to cling
involved, but pleasantly surprised in the walk
ahead of you....
many, many other things, friend.
when you are clouds
and rain tears
my ground will soak
them up, my trees
tickling your underside
with upside down
fingers
Gorgeous symmetry that is evolving still.
Loved this. A winner!
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Your words enrapture the spirit and create a feel of All things becoming ONE!
"when you are birds
I will let you fly
and track
your migratory pattern
and be waiting for you
when you make
land fall"
These words cause me to float above the fray and give a sense of security and calm. A lovely work of word art written here dear friend. You never cease to amaze and encourage my muse. I wish you well in the challenge.
Much Love & Respect Always ♥
Renee
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this is breath taking as the clouds rain tears so shall it pierce the heart and the feelings draw near as i whisper prayers to you... listen and be still this poem has such feel..I love this Hun Hugs and ty for sharing Angel♥
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Excellent piece poet..
when you are clouds and rain tears my ground will soak them up, my trees tickling your underside with upside down fingers This stanza stood out to me. But the whole write is a jewel.
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"When you are stars I will whisper prayers to you, and nothing will shine as bright" a terribly inspiring piece of optimism with a subtle hint of some underlying melancholy. Bravo caliokie
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This is timeless, and serene. You cradle us in your words and inspire us with your imagery! Beautiful!!!
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This is breathtaking. I love it. and the last three lines are just the most romantic thing. i want and need love like this. that uncompromising unwavering love that fills up a room and leaves you different.
bravo i love your work -
Garrison, you are a master poet indeed! This is breathtaking!
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This is hauntingly beautiful, as if the sounds of a lover sings on an evening breeze, yet you hear every single word as if he was beside you or her as the case may be. Loved this C
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OH!! This is just so lovely!! I love the sublime words, like promises of forever.
"when you are stars
I will whisper prayers to you
and nothing will shine as bright"
Just Beautiful!
K
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