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Candlelight Stars

candlelight across the night
could be the tiny white beads
that scents waves of my hair
that does shine upon my eyes
dark dreamy aura of black romance
stains like love pink potioned ink
sends words that can't be sought
what dark seeming soft flames
cool love that burns passion scent
that my heart leaves warmth drips
heaven set dimples of

I float endlessly upon this hot tea
could be true feelings a crime
my heart was raped here
I remember when once
I was inlove here there
were tears hanged across my eyes
when distance a shadow behind
my soulmate
I excell healing bitter medicine

When these feeling all come
Like a storm in my right
A dreamers kiss taste sweeter
Then my lover’s kiss
as soft as a funeral
Dress am I wearing awaited
For this funeral night
Lust my bridesmad but
I can’t see the ring on my finger
the beauty of gentlemen earth
curl with elegant peace
pleasure does moves my heart
like the voice of a man
does to the sweet ears of a women
as I sought for my love
my love sleep entwine in it
like a lover's spell are we
diped in the bowl of armor
taste of sweet cherry sauce

These formal elegant drapes
Strokes me in it soft dream
As I sought endlessly for my lover
Behind this fine lined curtains
“heaven take this down I plead
"Pull behind these curtains
I wish to see my love there"
to feel him to see him
all my life I can hear him
saying, "where are you?"
as I yell out  "I'm here"

but all I see his eyes
like the candles upon the sky




I can feel my heart move
like a fish within his breathe
let it be the pond my
fish heart does swim in


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  • Rick Weston silver member
    August 6

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    intriguing images you create here, in particular i like - dark dreamy aura of black romance stains like love pink potioned ink. good poem.


  • TwiztidMaggot
    August 6

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    This is a pretty good piece. I like how you wrote it. Very lovely! Keep up your great work. Congratulations on the silver trophy!

    TwiztidMaggot


  • Kathraina silver member
    June 16

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    Oh my gosh, the beauty here is....incredible!
    I love the tale you've woven here. Great emotion, imagery and flow throughout this piece. Very powerful write!
    Bravo


    ♥ Kate