fragrance floats
morning dewdrops glisten as
soft petals unfurl
for perfections other name
must certainly be rose
Author notes
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Comments
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Very stunning write
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my humble thanks and a grin
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I find the word "bejeweled" perhaps a bit too fancy of a word for the zen atmosphere you portray in this piece. The image itself is lovely and it's great to see you have such a craft with the style. That particular word just bugs me, that is all.
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corected you are right
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Now what you have chosen here, "morning dewdrops"
a summer morning, that keeps the somber undertone much more consistent, I rather like that a whole lot better! Better than I would have chosen! -
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ah shucks! thanks for the greenie
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Beautiful Write!
And you write perfection as well
and I mean that most sincerely. I also loved the 'bejeweled raindrops'
Jo
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my humble thanks and a grin
thank you my friend
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I like the 'bejeweled raindrops' especially
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ah perfection, i know it well, i see it each and every time i capture my reflection rippling in the stream of love and life. a good poem.
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my humble thanks and a grin my dear friend
it must be truue, as your relctions shines through all that you write, thank you for visiting
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This is beautiful and tranquil.
Awesome job here
favorite part
bejeweled raindrops glisten
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my eyes are smiling
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Awesome...I love roses, had many varieties at the old place. I miss my botanical garden.
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my humble thanks and a grin my dear friend
here only Rosa Rugusa will grow, climate too harsh, I long for the cabbage and musk roses whose sweet scents balnket the senses
grin
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Tranquil write..
Good form
perfection of a rose
Well done
Thanks for the share
Darky
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my humble thanks and a grin
ah roses and tanka they do grow together!
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