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Poptart

Its kind of cold outside
We're Waiting at our stop
I'm shivering
How is becky drinkin pop
The bus isn't here yet
The bus is runnin late
All the other kids
think this is great
For now they can play and run
Those kids can have a little fun

Now the bus pulls up
We all pile in
All the fun has stopped
Before it can begin
Joey's got a poptart
I wish that I had one
Right when I ask him
He takes the last bite and is done

as we drive along to school
I can only think of the poptart
Where did he buy it?
Walgreens, target, walmart?
I'm sitting in the front
Behind the driver of the bus
We have a cool bus driver
He's nice to us

Then my bus driver smiles
And looks back at me
He hands me a packet
I wonder what it could be
I open it carefully
Inside is a poptart!
A poptart for me!

I take a little bite
It tastes better than ever
I want to make it last
Through today and forever
But then again
I eat the whole thing up
Why a glass half full
When you can have a whole cup?

A contest entry

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Comments

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  • spanishrose
    June 27
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    just keep up the good work

    I am still learning a lot myself but from what I wrote I liked.

  • I could read it easily!!!!!

  • I think that this is pretty good thanks for sharing best to you in the contest have a great rest of the weekend be well.

  • sorry. again.

    In my last comment its supposed to say read.

  • sorry

    The color kind of sucks against the background. If you want to rerad it then I guess you have to highlight it. Really sorry.

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