Caitlin dances with the perfect partner
to inner music unheard by others,
toe in.... heel out,
cocooned in magic
created by sun and shadow,
Caitlin dances,
with the perfect partner.
A contest entry
- "I hope you dance..." by DeJaBlue.
450 points, ended June 16, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I like this, I could imagine peeking in on a little girl , wearing a floppy hat, alone in her room, just caught up in the moment and the joy of moving. It made me smile, and think of the girl I used to be and the daughter I hope to have someday. Thank you.
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Its short but it leaves me thinking and i like that
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This is a nice write. It gives off a certain emotion... which I am not sure which one... but this is an amazing write..
Thanks for sharing.
Sarah
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What a balance
Hooray! A perfect imagery showing real unambiguity. demarcating one's self with an irony of nature. marvelous. So delicate as a wing of butterfly
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such a great image created here, wonderfully creative and enduring. so glad i found this.
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Nice imagery. Short but not needing anything more. I should try some shorter poems. Thanks for the inspiration.
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This Is Fun
What a delight for me to read. Oh yes dancing so much fun and fun to watch too. Simply beautiful, fun and sweet. I loved this part for the imagery is fantastic!
toe in.... heel out,
Oh how I wish I could dance. Thank you for sharing with me.
Happy 4th of July,
Wishing You Many Blessings,
Much Love Always,
Kelle Marie
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cocooned in magic
What a beautiful line. Great poem you have here. Very nice indeed.
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very nice!
So much said in so few words. I truly enjoyed this piece! Thank you for sharing!
Shannon
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Such a cute take on the prompt. Isn't it amazing the simple things children find magic in? Thanks so much for entering.
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I too, am a fan of the repeated ending. It wraps everything up so nicely.
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i really like the repeat at the end, pulls the piece together nicely.
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