Would you like to hear a little story?
There was a young girl who was scared and alone,
She felt trapped in her body, her life and her home,
Turned to her brother to make her feel warm,
Ended up with a touch which she knew was all wrong.
There was a sweet teen who sacrificed for all others,
Went out of her way to help friends, kin and lovers,
Slowly died each day by the lack of concern,
When she damaged herself to help a friend move in home.
There once was a hurt woman who lay alone in her bed,
Beautiful and pristine even though she lay dead,
Beside her body lay a note to her "loved ones",
Explaining they were to blame for all she had done.
Author notes
1. The difference between friendship and love is how much you can hurt each other. -Ashleigh Brilliant
Yunalonei
The story of a girl abused by her brother when she was young, then taken advantage of by her friends who were supposed to be there for her. Until finally she couldn't take anymore and so she took her own life to end the pain her "loved ones" inflicted on her.
A contest entry
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Please tell me what you think
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I don't think people realize just how often things like this actually do occur. People have to remember to always appreciate their friends, especially the ones who help them out, and be willing to return the favor. Sometimes, a lack of concern can do more damage than blatant disrespect.
From what I've read of your poems, so far, you seem to have a knack for using extreme situations to further-emphasize the importance of the message you're trying to send... And the messages are most definitely ones that are in need of being heard.
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Thank you, i'm glad you like my poem. I try to speak from personal experience in my poems and if not i find out all i can so that any information i get across about a topic is the correct information.
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This was really sad =[
It had a good rhythm, maybe a little rough in just a few spots. -
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Thank you, i haven't written anything in a while which is why it's a bit rough. If you have any suggestions for revisions i'd welcome the critique
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