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Feud

Two families so different but so the same.

Between these families came feud, hate and fame.

Their love for money and greed take over their hearts.

And old hates continue and new ones start.

In these two familys love had never bloomed.

But a  hate that would last in the mysty air loomed .

An overload of power takes its form.

Two children in these families were soon born.

And from their start they are told to hate.

to fight to shoot to have a debate.

to grow up and vindicate there side.

And fill their family with everlasting pride.

These children grew up into beautiful teens.

Knew the hate, and knew their needs.

When the feud had calmed , on a winter noon.

Between the sun set and between the rise of the moon.

These teens met and soon grew in lust.

They only knew that it's a must.

They didn't bother or matter to ask each others names.

And then fell in love and fell in games.

Time past and no one knew .

Rumors were unleashed , but no one believed it was true.

'Love from those two families how did work it out?

They're only teenager's so they skipped that doubt.

The girl walked through her door.

not wishing for anything more.

then her brother's hit her, not soft but hard

Crushing her soul like a fragile peice of card

What are you doing with that man?

Don't you understand our killing plan?

The girl froze when she noticed that love is not what she thought.

But for its sake she insisted and fought.

Down the road the boy walked in pride.

When his cousin and brothers offered to give him a ride.

He accepted and entered, he thought it would be fun.

Then he felt on his forehead the cold press of a gun.

'What are you doing with that vandal?

'The whole town knows your huge scandal'

Leave her now, or you'll be dead.

To restore our pride cover her in red.

What they are talking about is awfully true.

From love they have learned something terribly new.

How could they make this mistake?

Now their love must be shown as fake.

They are a disgrace they must be dead. k

Each side wants to blow off their head.

But their love is so pure and strong.

They will now run away together and not return for long.

In that town their love was impossible.

But far away it is possible.

they now live by a lake in a temple of love.

and forever them and their love is protected from the angels above.

Hidden they forever will remain.

For the next feud they will take the blame.

Two family's reputations ruined by their children's love story.

Their standards dropped, because there is no such thing as endless glory

Author notes

F a i r y P r i n c e s s k
i was younger when i wrote this, i was in highschool and in free study class and i liked romeo and juliet type story's so to pass the time i wrote this, my teacher read it and liked it , it was what made me discover that i liked writing poetry. k

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  • SmartBrick
    September 18
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    I.....Love........IT!This is the best, I can't BELIEVE how much I LOVE THIS!


  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    September 18

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    This is a good little piece, I liked the rhyme and yes there weren't many differences between this and Romeo and Juliet. Well written. best to you in the contest


  • Tqop
    September 8

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    Wow! This story really took my breath away. I loved the rhyme and the energy you put into writing this about the family and their ups and downs. Great job! I love rhymes. Sometimes it's so hard to rhyme, but you mastered it.


  • NoseRingGirl
    August 30
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    please re-read my rules, figure out what you didn't do, and fix it before I will judge


  • forbidden-colour
    August 24

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    A vital poem, with important issues raised, certainly a good write, though it was a little long and needed structure this is good, thanks for entering.

  • lost.and.alone
    July 27
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    great && very very true.
    Well done.
    Thank you for entering && gook luck xx


  • Leance
    July 16
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    Hello, I am very sorry to inform you that I must disqualify your poem and remove it from the contest. There is a twenty (20) line maximum for this contest. If you have another poem twenty (20) lines or less that has won a bronze trophy, please do so enter it. Thanks so much for entering.
    Leance


  • Antebellum
    July 10
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    so true.

    I really liked the rhyme here.
    thanks for sharing.


  • BabyBun silver member
    June 27
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    Raw and true. Didn't flow brilliantly for me, but I definitely get the emotion, Nice job overall.


  • cazzy71
    June 22

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    CREATIVITY

    Creativity in its highest form.So amazing.It is early days for this contest,I have a limit on 50 entries,and so far have 25,but I have already added you to finalists lists.


  • Gods only child
    June 18
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    this poem i definately going on my finalist list!!!


  • xXMe17xX
    June 14
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    great!Sounds like romeo and juliet


    • fairy princess k
      June 14
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      heyyy =)

      i showed it to my friends and they thought the same thing hahaha , but it is acually baced on a true story , and yes there are Romeo and Juliet's in this day and age
      take care byyyyye xoxox

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