My love and I had such a wonderful love for each other
We moved to Alaska with our four children.
Oh! A place where you could feel close
To God every where you went.
My love and I were so full of dreams.
We had a boat which we would take it on
The waters of the Yukon River.
Sometimes with our children but other times
Just my love and I would go,
The two of us riding on a sea of glass.
I'd just lie back against him as he guides
Us along that Big River
Way up there in the most beautiful place
You could dream of,
So close to God you'd feel you could touch Him.
We saw so much a book might not
Describe all the wonders,
That filled our hearts with
Love for that land.
We left Alaska but in doing so,
We all left a piece of our hearts there..
Author notes
There was so much more as we did many things with our children,
but space did not allow all. Our home faced Norton Sound.
We'd slide down as far as we thought safe. Then have to pull the smallest back to the
top and start over.We went ice skating, fishing, sledding, picked berries...
and so much more!!!
A contest entry
- me and you ... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
400 points, ended June 16, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Have you ever been to such a place? Did you and your love ever have such a place?
Comments
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I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
OK:
Full stop at end of first line.
Children doesn't need a capital.
Capital A on the third line.
god is a made up myth, shouldn't be a capital g.
Oh, I could go on.
I would've prefered to read this without being asked to leave a constructive critisism.
It's a nice story.
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Ah..what a wonderfulk and intimate journey you did and had a enjoyuful time as well..love the scenario you created..thanks for sharing it...
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