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I'm not giving in

Your eyes don't leave mine as they dig deep in my soul
They're wearing me down, obsessed with control
I've gotten tired of your endless pleas
You're so desperate, you're practically on your knees
You want more and more but I can't give it to you
Training to be a good boy is long overdue
I'm not giving it away this time
Each time I'm disgusted at myself for giving into your grime
You beg and beg but each time I turn you down
Your tongue makes me tempted, but I stand my ground
No.. It's too hard, I want to give in
This is torture, you have no idea where I've been!
Fine, I'll give you what you want if afterwards you leave me in defeat
"Sigh, come here my canine friend, get your treat."

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J e n n y R o s e

Thinking of You- Katy Perry
"He pulled me in, i was disgusted with myself"

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  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    November 6
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    Wasn't sure at first whether to laugh
    or cry! So the ending was a great
    chuckle. Thanks for entering.

    ~Jeannie


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    October 20
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    This is cute; very much so
    I want a dog!!!
    Thank you for sharing your humor; MUCH appreciated!
    All the best!


  • funnybone
    October 17
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    lol i like the twist at the end made me lol,
    great write dear poet and good luck in my contest


  • SmartBrick
    September 18
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    Yes! YES! YEEESS! That was PERFECT! Loved it. What more can I say? Spectacular Amazingful? Ya, ya. Spectacular amazingful.

  • catstar
    September 16

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    This is great. It pulls you in and is extremely entertaining. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing. Good luck in the contest.


  • BitterSweetsOwn
    September 14
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    Loved the ending!


  • sgking123 gold member
    September 3

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    well done

    I guess you did this one rather well.There was a twist definitely....first you were emphatic in denial of the acceptance and then...voila the twist....you did succumb...well done.Thanks for your entry dear.


  • My Chronos gold member
    September 2
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    Now that's a twist I loved it and I adored the rhyme. Thanks so much for entering my contest.


  • LullabyOfADeadMan
    September 2
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    haha didnt expect the ending. thanks for entering in my contest. best of luck!

    ~~Tay.


  • Sheilasbabygal4life
    September 1
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    This was funny. I didnt find it quite funny until the end though, but thanks for entering and best of luck!!~


  • pplealwaysleave
    August 9
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    Wowzers

    That was interesting.
    Thank you for entering.
    Good luck in the contest.

  • XxLuckyxX
    August 9

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    This is a very cute poem, quite amusing. Very well written with a smooth flow and a very endearing tone. Gotta love dogs, with their constantly licking tongues and pleading eyes, always eager for a treat or their next meal. I think you did a great job here. A truly pleasant read. Thank you so much for entering. Best of luck in the contest.


  • superbanana
    July 30
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    haha, my dogs exactly like this, a complete bugger at meal times
    Thanks for entering and good luck


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    July 21

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    i would like to thank you very much for this
    entry into my contest and to wish you the best of luck in the judging process. viyanna rosemarie


  • TwiztidMaggot
    July 18

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    cute. hah. I liked it. Thanks for entering my contest. I wish you the best of luck in the contests. And keep up your amazing work!

    TwiztidMaggot

  • XxLoverOfDarknessxX
    July 16
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    aww this was cute! I loved it! it brough a smile to my face and made me laugh. keep up the good work! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!


  • ladybug.
    June 23

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    Interesting take on the song. I never would have thought of this. It's well-rhymed, which is impressive. Thank you for sharing.

  • piccola silver member
    June 23

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    what does this have to do with the way you feel about contests? I see it entered in many contests that have nothing to do with contests ... odd. Perhaps it is a metaphor and the contest host is a dog asking for a treat?

  • XxLoverOfDarknessxX
    June 21
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    lol i loved this one! it was really really cute! i thought it was very sweet. i thought the rhyme made this poem alot more powerful, and the rhythm was amazing as well. an adorable write! keep up the good work! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!


  • xxSerendipityxx
    June 21

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    This is really good. It's really cute and it reminds me of my dog because with him I often go through the same thing. Best of luck in the contests, Hope you win


  • Menna
    June 20
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    Awe! This is really cute! I loved the poem and i was all like awe this is so sweet and such a cute love poem, and then it was about a dog and it was just adorable! Loved the twist ending! Nice write, nice rhyming, nice poem, good work. Best of luck in my contest.

    ~Menna


  • Samantha Marie
    June 19

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    awww this is so cute!!
    the ending was magnificent,
    what a twist!
    thank you for entering and good luck!


  • Symphony
    June 19

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    LOL, this was cute - and I know those brown eyes only too well!! Great way of building up the suspense, and then to that hilarious climax; I didn't see it coming at all ;-)

  • Judith Chandler
    June 16
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    I had to laugh when I got to the last line. Kind of ironic in tone. I loved it.


  • The Drifter
    June 15

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    You write wonderful poetry. You are brillant. Maybe this is your purpose.
    This is a great write and a pleasure to read.


  • Raoul Duke
    June 15

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    I like it, it builds in energy line on line until the last couplet when i can really feel your dejection disappointment. Made me think about something I never have had to before.

  • Logan loves Dylan
    June 14
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    WOW

    THAT WAS AWESOME!!!!!!!!!


  • xochocoholicxo
    June 14
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    wow. that.was.beau.ti.ful. just completely amazing


  • S8htheatre
    June 14
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    you. are. a .genius.


  • BleedingScars
    June 14

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    I truthfully think it's iffy it's not the kinda poetry i'd read i read more poems from the pain ur goin through and stuff like that but w/e


  • Kira65
    June 14
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    This is great i agree with Yorkshire Rose when he says "pure genius"


  • Yorkshire Rose
    June 14
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    pure genuis


  • paulcreates silver member
    June 14

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    HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!
    You really are talented. This is very very good. You hold the reader in the grip of your pen until that last hilarious line.


    Nicely done!
    Paul


  • glassrose11
    June 13
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    awesom

    hahahahahahaha i liiiiiiiiiikeee this one your one talented person omg dude i qotta read it again


  • deathchamber-of-sin
    June 13
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    this is really good darl.i like it.


  • Superman-
    June 13
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    thats really good.,

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