Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

This Was The Year When

Missing image
~by Gregg Rowe~

This was the year when
I discovered the joys of self-massage
Watch it grow and expand
Feel the soft skin
The puckered eye
Explore and enjoy
My maleness
Without feeling guilty

This was the month where
I stole chunks of time
Escape into a solitude
With oils and creams
And fragrance incenses
A map of shaved skin
Valleys on zones undiscovered
Fingertips caressing nipples
Gathering sweet pre-cum

This is the month where
I kissed him uninhibited
For the first time
Place myself in the moment
Allow him to explore
His tongue upon my lips
Whisper hot breath
Upon my nipples
Let him explore my napes
And crevices until
We become wet with one another

This is the night where
My lips taste him
Savour the salty soft skin
With a gentle hardness
I slide his jeans down
Feel the warmth
Escape from his thighs
As my lips kiss between them

This is the hour where
We have been nude for two
Glisten bodies shine by candlelight
Slide down each others throats
As our electricity passes

This is the hour where
He gently fingers inside me
My body quakes in pleasure
His slender fingers slide in and out
To the rhythmic motions of his mouth

This is the minute where
I want to love him
Slide myself in
Let him experience my
Engorged manhood
As he lifts his athletic body
To join my hips

This is the second
We all wished
Time would halt

This is the instant where
In unison
Ejaculations erupt
Simultaneously
Embracing
Hugging
Kissing
That eternal moment

Author notes

"Smile, It Confuzez People"

Love-
What is love anyway? Explain it to me. Explain to me what you feel love is. I don't want to know how you feel about your lover, or spouse. I want to know what you think love is in general. About anybody. The kind of love that has no conditions. Tell me what you feel love truly is.

Written October 4th, 2003

In a list

A contest entry

What did you think

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

1 - 35 of 35

  • im dead - go away
    December 28, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    I liked this on a few levels.
    It seemed like it was about masturbation in the beginning, maybe it was, and it felt...sensual, not smutty, which a lot of people don't do.
    It had a good erotic flow. The wording wasn't too over the top, or too low-bro; it rested at a pretty good level.

    The one offsetting thing I felt was the beginning of the third paragraph. It caught me a bit off guard. Until that point I thought you were talking about masturbation, and suddenly there's another person in there.
    In my opinion, you should run through that, and either make the beginning more clear, or put a smoother transition into the third stanza; it just felt a little too abrupt.

    Aside from that, well written.


  • Blooming Poet
    March 21, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    a long but amazing poem, so sensual and so sexy. the sexual content is so well said in this poem. I love it. Especially here:

    I slide his jeans down
    Feel the warmth
    Escape from his thighs
    As my lips kiss between them


  • Asylaarix
    December 7, 2006

    Edit | Reply
    This was absolutely beautiful ... Imagery so powerful ... you really put yourself into this ... I am very proud to have this entry in my contest ... I am absolutely astounded ... you really know how to keep your reader interested and wanting more ... Keep up the excellent work ... and deffinately good luck in the contest ...

    Smile, It COnfuzez People
    <3 Sparkeh


  • riccadeana
    December 7, 2006

    Edit | Reply
    This is a very seductive and erotic piece and loved it. Very well written. Thank you for entering and good luck!!!


  • E.m.d
    April 9, 2006
    Edit | Reply
    I love the picture!


  • Ice Phoenix 8
    March 28, 2006
    Edit | Reply
    Wow..this was an amazing poem.I love how you made the words flow so smoothely...although it didnt rhyme and it was a bit long..i really did enjoy reading this poem. I can really relate to this and I bet alot of people like myself can as well.
    Great write and good luck


  • February 2, 2006
    Edit | Reply
    Oh wow!!! This was so many things at once... passionate, loving, sensual, erotic, and wonderful He should consider himself lucky to have found such a great man!!

    Thank you for contributing this wonderful piece!!! Good luck!!!

    *~Callie~*


  • angels song
    December 27, 2005
    Edit | Reply
    wow great piece. It very sweet yet erotic with great details. Thank you so much for entering it in the contest. Good luck and keep writting.
    ~*TONYA*~

  • poetyaknoit
    December 18, 2005
    Edit | Reply
    Very interesting, passionate write. I like the flow, and the shift in the end. Keep on writing, and best of luck in the contest. ~TC


  • dark desire
    July 15, 2005
    Edit | Reply
    beautiful... very beautiful, and passionate and oh... so many words to describe, so many i just can't think of right this second. oh but any ways... very good write. ~pixie~

  • Pinkypants
    May 29, 2005
    Edit | Reply
    Hehe No problem! This was a wonderful poem and throughly deserved the gold! Stay well my friend!


  • lordoftherings gold member
    May 29, 2005
    Edit | Reply
    Pinkypants: I would like to thank you for the Gold Trophy in your contest for this is a very special poem about a relationship that I am presently in but my friend is always travelling and I do not get to see him that often (he is a dancer on the world stage of ballet), so when we do have the opportunity, as you can see by the write, we make it worthwhile

  • Pinkypants
    May 13, 2005
    Edit | Reply
    OOOOOHHH my! First of all, I am absolutely honoured you have decided to enter my contest. You works are always intriguing, beautiful, exciting, moving and breathtakingly captivating and this poem is NO exception

    This poem flows so beautifully .. its gains pace with every stanza and leaves the reader wet with excitement.. regardless of their gender or sexuality! I love the way in which you use repetition at the start of each stanza .. it really helps with pace and flow of the poem.

    What can I say... breathtaking. Sexy. Wonderful. Erotic. A wet dream!!

    Fantastic
    Edited on May 13, 1:50 p.m. because ''.


  • VcWhit
    March 10, 2005
    Edit | Reply

    stimulating

    wow..I loved this..i felt like I was there..i think I actually did get horny reading this...Im defintely adding it to one of my favs


  • Delicate Fire Water
    March 8, 2005
    Edit | Reply
    Wow, this was superb, and I loved it! Thank you so much for sharing. Best of luck in the contest.

    ~Steph~ ~

    ~~Your angel forever.

  • ack1013
    February 21, 2005
    Edit | Reply
    Your use of language in this poem is very well done and I agree its very tasteful considering its genre, which I normally dont appreciate at all.

    thanks for entering!


  • Nicolette gold member
    January 17, 2005
    Edit | Reply

    Passionate journey!

    I think that somehow I have read this poem before, because the repetition of "this is" and the process or movement from year to instant ring little bells for me. I guess I've read this before without commenting and the bells now ring for me because this poem has stayed with me, it touched me and lingered in my mind. This is a truly beautiful and sensual poem that paints the journey of lovers and the unity of souls with passion, yet also tenderness. It is very sexy and elegant - and that is how I like erotica! You've shown your poetic skill with this write because it has beauty and passion, technical excellence, powerful emotion and it educates. It is quite unique, readability is very good and the imagery vivid without being too explicit. The only thing I think you could have developed more is on the metaphor side, but other than that, a truly remarkable poem that pulls the reader in, taking him along on the journey of ecstasy. Thank you for entering this beautiful poem!

    ~ Nicolette
    Edited on Jan 17, 12:15 because ''.


  • Hearta
    January 16, 2005
    Edit | Reply

    A new insight to things, and how lovely it is

    I learn a lot from you you know... and I don't believe there is any other way. You express such pure clean pleasure which actually makes me curious.. (like writes should make a reader feel) no? beautifully expressed. I feel you've candidly shared an important part of your heart and emotions.. so thank you for that..

    also.. I thought i was being unique with your beginning.. but no... you've beat me to it! *damn damn* lol well written my friend


  • December 21, 2004
    Edit | Reply
    this was really dood and detailed i loved it..thank you for entering and good luck


  • wishintreeUK
    December 18, 2004
    Edit | Reply

    Superb Piece Of Writing!

    Gregg, before I even began reading this, the graphic caught my eye, that set the scene for what was to follow... the whole of your poem seemed to embrace flowing lines of communication through the joining of two souls in joyful discovery... there is a peace about your poem that excells all other emotion! your imagery is superb!
    ~Katie~


  • DrkPoet
    December 14, 2004
    Edit | Reply
    I'm always amazed by your talent especially when it comes to your erotic writes as they always flow together so well. The sensuality behind this was fabulous. Another wonderful write from you Gregg, keep up the awesome work.


  • tattoomysoul
    December 13, 2004
    Edit | Reply
    This was a pleasure to read. Very vivid in its details. GOOd job and good luck


  • ca ne fait rien
    October 14, 2004
    Edit | Reply
    Outstanding, breathtaking. The mapping, the exploration, the journey bulding up to 'the second we all wished time would stop', but it didn't, and what was beyond that second- the 'eternal moment'. Absolutely rivetting, both in the erotic sense and the appreciation of superbly crafted poetry. I am so pleased I stumbled across your work here, and thank you very much for it.


  • Almighty Aphrodite gold member
    September 18, 2004
    Edit | Reply
    I am going to have to try some of those oils and aromatherapy salts--because after reading this sensually uninhibited (perhaps hazardous in my case!) write, I now know that there has been something missing from my encounters! I think that the repetition of "this was the (day, hour, month, etc.) when" really added spice to this already piquant and flavorful write. I could've superimposed myself into this fantasy, it was just that real for me. Mmm. Well anyway, I'm sorry it took me so long to come by and read it--college is a hassle! Thank you for taking the time to enter, and good luck to you in the contest.

    Many blessings,

    Raven Aurora


  • candy177
    September 16, 2004
    Edit | Reply
    You know, Gregg (call me a hypocrite if you like), I don't care too much for homo-erotica...but yours, yours just has that sensuality to it that I enjoy reading. That speaks volumes about your writing skills, when you can write something that your reader would not care for under any other circumstance but feels compelled and truly enjoys what you have written. I love the repetition...this is the day, the hour etc. You are just amazing. Such a sensual and raw piece, with vivid imagery...good luck, not that you need it!


  • Diamond
    September 10, 2004
    Edit | Reply

    SUPERB WRITE

    Oh, I love oils and creams and fragrant incenses, it makes for better lovemaking and provides a calming affect on the mind and body. This was a very beautiful piece of poetry here despite my taste or preferences. I really enjoyed reading this piece for it's imagery and the writers imagination. This is how I would love for my man to make love to me very sensual and passionate, exploring every curve and valley. It would be an understatement to say that I really loved this poem. I thank you for entering and I wish you the best of luck. Great Job. Avril


  • leo2
    August 22, 2004
    Edit | Reply
    I wont comment on the content but the form and imagery are exquisite.

    Frightendove


  • Dishy
    August 22, 2004
    Edit | Reply

    Hot

    A pleasure to read .

  • Odyssey
    August 19, 2004
    Edit | Reply
    What struck me as much as the erotic nature and sensuality, was the way that you used time to tie the whole poem together. Thanks for entering, and best of luck in the competition.


  • kay a
    July 22, 2004
    Edit | Reply
    i absolutely loved this poem...it was visual, powerful, sensual, and awesome (for lack of a better word)
    it was loving, touching, soft, erotic...this was what i was looking for...i also liked your descending form
    i enjoyed reading it
    thank u for entering, it was a beautiful piece
    kay


  • PlayLikeWeAreInLove gold member
    July 11, 2004
    Edit | Reply
    this is really powerful, like philosphyofkate said, and is very descriptive and flowing...great write! byez
    ~Karinn -random person-


  • philosphyofkate
    June 11, 2004
    Edit | Reply

    *bows*

    i came across this in a roundabout accidental sort of way.. & im incredibly glad. it's beautiful and powerful. the description and clarity and incredible tantalizing details.. spectacular.


  • Desire gold member
    April 10, 2004
    Edit | Reply
    The beauty of your sensual game
    Leaves me wanting more again
    It does not matter to me who plays
    For I love to envision the raw untamed
    Your emotions expressed well and felt
    Leaving me to drool and melt

    Very sensual and inviting~
    Very much exciting

    Best wishes to you in the contest my friend~

    Big hugs and much love~Desire

  • lordoftherings gold member
    March 20, 2004
    Edit | Reply

    Commendable Critiquer

    Thank you Desire, I try to show honesty in my writing because that is all that I know after what I have been through. Hugs
    Edited on Mar 21, 2:30 because 'spelling, as usual lol'.

  • Desire gold member
    March 19, 2004
    Edit | Reply
    ~ lordoftherings~
    Thank you for your poem entry
    I will be back to comment
    For I plan to read and absorb
    Then give you my take on it
    But I wanted to let you know
    That I received your Erotica piece
    Thank you again my fellow poet
    I look forward to your release
    Big hugs and much love~Desire
    ~I commend you for speaking out and not hiding from within ~

1 - 35 of 35