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Beautiful



Holiday lights strung over the vanity
And last night’s love-warmth light my cheeks -
And touches the silvered red to gold-
Mirror-twin smooths her fingers over the smile
Recalls
when I became a bride for your eyes-
Brow crinkled tight against all nervous light
Quaking flowers stilled by your smile as we met-
Even before the walk across, you sealed me-
Yours!

There you married me with your eyes
You were beautiful.

~*~

The breakfast sun serves truth upon his generous plate
Bids us partake-
Before you shade your eyes to the morning glare,
You still see me a bride in your eyes
The corners wrinkle up
When you shine that bridegroom smile-
Our kiss good bye for the day seals you-
Mine!

In that welcoming place behind your eyes
I am beautiful.

~*~

When lilac clouds the eastern moon
In the evening of our walk together
A halted step
Always will I be the bride of your eyes
In starry wink we'll meet
Though faces lined and hands infirm,
The vision never shaken from this trusted seal-
Ours!

When the bridegroom's light beckons still in your eyes,
We will be beautiful.

~*~

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  • I see no need for revision, aside from my contest having closed. That was a wonderful poem and the imagery was divine! "There you married me with your eyes". Ah, I am not one to gush but wow!


    • Siderea
      June 14
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      Thank you

      Thank you for the wonderful review. Hope the submission made it in time for your contest!