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Because You Scared Her

Your life belongs to me now.
It's not a question of what will happen,
merely a matter of when it will come,
and the geography of the event.

You never should have been there,
never should have crossed that fence,
and never should have touched that door.
In the end, you pay for things like that.

You thought you were bad ass dudes,
acting like cudgel packing neanderthals
bringing trouble to the innocent.
But this time it was MY innocent.

 

I'm coming, and that's as clear as I can be.

You have the only warning you will get,

and you had better heed it well.

You never should have scared her.

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It's personal, but yeah, I had a bad night too.

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  • jinsays gold member
    July 9, 2009
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    gulp.

    I dont know what to say.


    • HomeGrown
      July 10, 2009
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      Nothing really to say on this. Situation is pretty much handled, took some doing. I hate gangs for the simple fact that they are so hard to get through to find the right person. But it's all roses now.


  • yourbentangel
    June 15, 2009

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    I believe

    knowing you as I do, and the situation, that you mean every word that you wrote, every emotion that you feel, every thing that you will do in response to such said incident. Just be careful,,,,, K? It was good to see you Saturday and I'll check in with you before I come back over and by the way... things didn't seem right when we got off the phone on Sunday... what can I do to make it better for you my friend?