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Quit Crying Your Eyes Out, Baby

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Baby girl got a nasty wakeup call from the world last night. Her nightmares consisted of scratched swing sets and flying saucers, of being kidnapped and broken fire extinguishers and existing elsewhere.

The boyfriend went from screaming that she was a slut to beating her face into the bedside table with his iron hand every night. But she was a silent sufferer and she still went to work with her hair pinned up in a bun, all the same.

Sometimes though, there were sunny autumnal days that brought back the sweetness of a former life. This was years ago, when cell phones were not permanently fused to palms and working hard was a bigger necessity than outward appearances. She was never the type to fall starstruck into a realm of plastic splendor, but she secretly enjoyed how the city lights were laced across the skyline and the hushed whirling of film inside cameras.

He killed that for her, though. He smashed her inner brightness down with an aluminum bat and asphyxiated her irises into murky purple smoke. The moon fell down in the east and Jupiter exploded somewhere near northern Africa, yet Baby Girl kept her lips sewn shut with barbed wire and shoved needle points up her spine to numb the stinging feeling of noteverbeingenoughtomakehimsmile.


One day, she got sick of being the rotting sugar on somebody else’s yellow teeth. She grew tired of sleeping on the tattered couch and staring helplessly at her scarred fingers from when he put an iron to her snow-white skin.

One day, Baby Girl walked out of that godforsaken house and went directly to a good friend, someone she knew would help her.

After countless moments of gleeful torture, he is finally in jail. She is now permanently in a wheelchair. Sometimes, I can catch glimpses of her gnarled fingertips or the vines crisscrossed around her corneas. But she is a silent sufferer and she still goes to work with her hair pinned up in a bun, all the same.

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s h e s t i l l s m i l e s x
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sorry this was kinda depressing :\ i have no idea where it came from, haha, it was just inspired by the prompt. hope it's okay though!

prompt: - "the world just chewed her up & spat her out." [ooh la: the kooks.]

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  • you are seriously
    one of the most amazing poets i have ever read in my entire life
    and i think you are my inspiration
    you inspire me to write
    i love your poetry
    never stop

    will you be my AP sister

  • Writing0Freedom
    November 6

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    Baby girl got a nasty wakeup call from the world last night. Her nightmares consisted of scratched swing sets and flying saucers, of being kidnapped and broken fire extinguishers and existing elsewhere.
    -that's a stunning piece of work. everything about it has so much emotion and breathtaking detail, and imagery. it's really emotional but pwowerful.


    - lights were laced across the skyline
    - really adore that line so so much.

    metimes, I can catch glimpses of her gnarled fingertips or the vines crisscrossed around her corneas. But she is a silent sufferer and she still goes to work with her hair pinned up in a bun, all the same.-
    that's such a painful and powerful image, it's so so sad
    this is amazing!


  • Tzipora
    September 24
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    ah- ah- ah mazing !.

    wonderful write.

  • Wow, you can truly tell such a haunting story with fantastic imagery.
    The emotions run deep through the write.

    Amazingamazingamazing.
    Thank you for entering! <3


  • endless-lover silver member
    August 22

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    lovely girl in the pic;
    as for the poem its self, it was amazing!!
    the imagery was grand,
    as the words flow well
    keep up the work doll
    you have something amazing here;

    vanna

  • omg, this was so sad. i loved the depth of the emotions, wow. loved it

  • OMG

    Oh My goodness!! I well,shit, I lost what I was going to say!! This is written sooo deep!!So sad!! "silent sufferer" that was me at 16 and No longer will I do so!! Or let anyone around me do so!! Never settle for less!! Thanks for this write! It was breathtaking!! Your great!! :-)

  • You're officially going on my favorites list.


  • SpydurPoet gold member
    June 25

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    Oh God that was sad. Oh God. How can someone read this and not cry? That's so sad. You wrote phenomenally, though.
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~


  • Madison Mary
    June 20

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    Jesus, I didn't know what to expect from the title, but for some reason I didn't think I would enjoy it. Quite the opposite. This was magnificent - beautiful imagery and amazing eloquence. Definitely a finalist, and thank you so much for entering xx


  • DreamtSong-x
    June 18

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    the emotions in this are so heartwrenching. and phenomenal. some of the most original lines are in this poem. amazing job.

    -- Tor

  • Holy crap this is amazing. I think this may be one of your best pieces. So rich in intense and raw emotion, with a great story telling element to it.

    Fantastic prose
    Well penned

  • Ohhhmyyygawddd. I absolutely LOVE this. It's so different from what you usually write, and it's still freaking amazing. Gahh. Your wording and imagery is incredible, and I envy your talent >:]

    - She was never the type to fall starstruck into a realm of plastic splendor, but she secretly enjoyed how the city lights were laced across the skyline and the hushed whirling of film inside cameras.
    ...

    Wow. I love how you phrased that. You really worded it in a way that was like a punch in the gut, and in a way many can relate to. It's so poetically and beautifully written, yet in the saddest way. You surely have a way with words, my love!


    -The moon fell down in the east and Jupiter exploded somewhere near northern Africa, yet Baby Girl kept her lips sewn shut with barbed wire and shoved needle points up her spine to numb the stinging feeling of noteverbeingenoughtomakehimsmile.
    ...

    FUCK. That is just pure brilliance. The whole reference about Jupiter and Africa, [hahahah AFREEEKKAAA!] was pretty much amazing. I loved everything about that fawking stanza, especially the last part. :/ Prettymuchincredible.

    -One day, she got sick of being the rotting sugar on somebody else’s yellow teeth.
    ...

    Thatisaboutthemostoriginalthingeverwritten. :]
    Damnnn frank.
    Just damn.
    And the ending was perrrfect. I like how you used the 'hair pinned in a bun' again, just to wrap the whole entire scenario up. Such a sad story ):

    Iloveyouuu!♥

  • this is like a twisted fairy tale, beautiful yet very sad and depressing
    i like how you tied the poem together with the hair pinned up in a bun line, it shows that no matter what your protagonist still had class to live everyday without fear


  • Antebellum
    June 13

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    this is amazing.
    Reminds me of the type of stuff I write lol.
    excellent write.

    "He killed that for her, though. He smashed her inner brightness down with an aluminum bat and asphyxiated her irises into murky purple smoke"

    I love these lines.
    amazing choice of words.

  • this is so beautiful but not in a happy way but choice of words. It's horrible things like these happen. Watching the suffering makes it so hard as you begin to know no hope. What can one person do. I loved your words loved the repeat at the end. Great response to prompt.

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