The bitter sunrise,
dances on your skin-
A faint reminder,
of days spent sleeping in.
~+~+~+~
The screaming silence,
taunts our every glance-
The seconds shatter,
and the days barely advance.
~+~+~+~
In the distance,
the asphalt turns to glass-
I check my rearview,
and see you in my past.
~+~+~+~
A vacant memory,
aside a dusty highway-
I'll pick you up,
if you're ever going my way.
Author notes
I could see Dashboard playing this.
A contest entry
- So Long, So Long by Catie Sheeran.
800 points, ended June 14, 4 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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wow! i loved this write!
you have a great talent for conveying so much, without writing a novel!
perfect rhyme, that didnt have the slightest taste of being forced!
The line ..
I check my rear view,
and see you in my past.
..just won me over!
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I really like the imagery. People who love rhyme would be all over this! tho, "screaming silence" is rather cliche
...I know you could do better than that! 
but overall...great piece...Ya, I could see dashboard playing something like this
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