Tick-tock, tick-tock,
same old same, everyday,
bored out of my mind,
really need a change of pace.
Click, door opens.
Blink. Wait. What's that? Who is it?
Blink again. Did I just see a set of wings?
Or was I only imagining it?
Behold the glow of such beauty; it hurts my eyes.
How magical is the essence within?
Surely an angel; that's all I can fathom,
but why isn't he in Heaven?
Quick! Breathe!
Pure eyes of liquid gold sweep over me.
How could such beauty even exist,
when it's forbidden to be completely seen?
Curse the fabrics!
How dare such beauty be concealed?
But surely I would be completely overwhelmed,
if all of his marvelous radiance were revealed.
Have mercy, dear Gladiator Angel!
For I cannot control my stare.
If it were illegal to gaze upon your beauty,
I cannot say that I would care.
Dizzy! Shake it off!
His hand just brushed against my cheek,
so soft is his skin, like the kiss of the morning dew.
Fire blazes through me, and I cannot even think.
His hair. Thick. Black. Soft.
Beckoning for me to touch.
His voice. How his words flow!
How my blood begins to rush!
Have mercy my Gladiator Angel!
I'm trying to stay away from you!
But what you do, you do so well,
and I'm captivated by you!
You're the warrior of hearts,
for so many have fallen.
I should run. I should hide.
But I can't escape your callin'.
Wake up! My stupid heart!
Won't you open your eyes?
Run! Get Away! Hurry! Right now!
Can't you see you need to hide?
Honey-coated skin.
He's the most dangerous of his kind.
Taming my Gladiator Angel,
is going to be a challenging ride.
Author notes
D i s t i l l e d G i n >>I belive this is one of my best pieces. I hope you can draw some inspiration from it, as it is most unique.
In a list
A contest entry
- Already On My Favorites List by Ted E Bare.
400 points, ended October 17, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything, I need inspiration. by Xxpoison.kissesxX.
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hm, i enjoyed this piece... kind of iffy at first.. but it just got better and better throughout it.. the imager was excellent.. :]
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it was OK not something that i would read but read the by line you left under the poem that you wrote under neath and though would try to help you have a way with words you know how to use them not a lot of people do it was composed pretty well and personally if it was a women reading it they would love it from what my other half says any way lol she liked it bless it be peace xx
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I believe any Gladiator of any type woulld like to be in that compromising postion. It certainly gave me quite a bit to think about (to include the discussion currently going on in the Club about certain things). I have always wanted to check this piece out for the title alone and I surely wasn't dissappointed! I plan to write something titled "Gladiator" (but with the play on words, glad he ate her...which will be labled for adult content as there's no way to write for that but in the adult section). I want to thank you for your entry into the following contest: "Already On My Favorites."
Ted E
PS: Your entry has been blessed by the three wise clappers, but don't spend the whole nine points in one place(lol)!
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I thought the poem good, started off very well indeed, and also the ending, but I thought got a bit lost in the middle, could do with losing a couple of verses perhaps? (constructive criticism, I hope). Just my opinion, the other two comments seem otherwise, so still up to you. Regards.
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you have a magnificent way of writing. with long poems such as this i usually skip to the end.
but with this one of yours, i didnt want the words to end.
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Thanks!!
I'm glad I intrigued you enough so that you would read through it. Now you understand a little of how my odd mind works ..lol I'm a dreamer, what can I say?? Again, thanks for the words of inspiration. When I get the chance I'll read another by you and return the favor.
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wow!!
amazing!! wow, i wanted to touch and be touched by him as well!! beautiful!! and i'm talking about the poem, and the angel is too!! major kudos!!
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