Six weeks doctors said,
prognosis she'll be dead.
Nothing else they can do,
twenty six life is through?
Take my heart rip it out!
Turn my body inside out.
Let her live for her I'd die,
What's earth without sky?
Cut deep surgeons knife,
loving her more than life.
Wounds bleed crimson red,
life for me now is dead.
A contest entry
- THE ROAR WAS DEAFENING AND WE HELD TIGHT TO THE OTHER'S TREMBLING HAND by Swan song.
800 points, ended June 19, 6 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Do you think it is possible to love someone more than your own life?
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This is a short poem but none the less it is still an extremely powerful and bitterly sad poem. The 3rd and 4th lines of the 2nd Verse cut right through to the very core of my heart.
Superbely written!!
I have never been in such a position, nevertheless, I am sure I can understand your feelings for there are some I am sure that I would willingly give my life if necessary.
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Thankyou RikkiRae for your kind thoughts towards me ... I appreciate you taking the time to call by and leave an encouraging comment.
The kind words and thoughts of others always help a person to deal with life's tradgedies.
So once more thank you sincerely.
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what a wonderful & genious way of describing something that one faces in hard time. Bravo.
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Thank you kindly heron for your kind encouragement and nice response to my poem.
I have only just seen your comment today I do so apologise for not replying earlier.
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excellent
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excellent work
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Thank you unbossomingsofa15 so much for your kind comment on my poem. I am sorry that I did not get to say thank you sooner, but it did not show up in my notes or messages and I have only just seen it now.
So once more ... thank you.
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Thank you for your kind comment aditi ... I am sorry i don't know how to do the chatroom thingy but I would be pleased to chat with you here on the poem if you want to?
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Very sad, but brilliantly expressed. Great job.
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Thank you Evemauy for taking the time to read and leave a kind comment on my poem.
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I really liked this poem. It shows how somethings in life cause fear. Sounds like cancer in this case. I enjoyed the read!!
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Thank you for your encouraging comment ZacEfronRocks ... yes it was sadly cancer.
Death is no respecter of age in that it takes ones so young.
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it is difficult to rhyme and get the message out but i think you did it in a very excellently way Nicely done
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Thank you Swan song for your kind comment and thank you for the points too.
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The pain of your loss comes through, still strong after time has passed. Keep the faith, we know we will see these ones again! Much love to you.
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Hallo dearest all faded blue ... when I read the content of this contest I simply could not resist.
Thank you for your kindness and encouragement dearest sister.
Time flies and waits for no-one and although the years have passed by I would gladly have given my life to have saved hers would still do that right this minute ... sad it just could not be .
I personally think that dying must be easier than living without your loved ones, don't you?
My faith is still very strong and sustains me although I still hurt and miss her ... but such is life a sis?
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SO SWEET!!!
It is truly a difficult road to travel as one you care about is not well and not having long to live. One prays they could trade places with them as their heart cries for them.
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Thank you dearest Pureheart for stopping by and taking the time to leave me kind words.
The kindness of dear friends is always appreciated to know that others care.
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Very good write! I liked this a lot, quite sad though but nevertheless good!
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Thank you for your much appreciated kind comment.
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