call me earth if you are rain,
thunderhead dripping steam,
sultry storm unnerving every reservation;
let my curve redeem your oath
let hips of widened meadow,
laced in wilted petals, weeping bloom,
blush again in reddened wonder,
swollen full,
suckling every bead of dew
from willing, nimbus lips
let taut, brown lands of summer's drought
soak as sponge in supple washing;
let templed hills and desert crevice
fill beneath the licking rush
call me earth if you are rain,
swift release of higher passion,
until I drown in spilling tempest,
whelmed by flood,
refusing rainbows
Author notes
Image prompt: "coldmemories" by lilyas (see contest page)
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A contest entry
- For Poets With Feathers Group only... by poet2angels.
800 points, ended June 19, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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you used pretty words :]
i like your word choice and your imagery
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Well-crafted with metaphor.
Congrats on the HM.
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I think I have discovered the true meaning of
metaphor.
You do great work
Joe
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This is beautiful work, so full of passionate release and loving nourishment.Splendid images, a wonderful piece of poetry indeed.
Smile always.
Tony
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Contagious in its passion...
I will reread until I am drenched in it!
What an inspiring verse to lean towards the sensual side of nature and her spillings.
This read commands with soft-spoke beauty.
Blue
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this is simply...superb writing.
i love this
lane
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What a poem!!!!
This was quite lovely my friend,
Full of imagery and tenderness.
Your creativity shines:~)
The very best to you in the contest.
Love Peace
campanaro
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this is wonderful...there is a sensual side of nature, skies to land, air to sea and rain how the lands seem to wait and then sate itself...the imagery here is filled like the land under a storm...beautiful...PK
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This poem speaks to all the senses. loved the title and the way this poem falls on the ear when read aloud. I agree with Mari, it has wonderful, soft sensual tones. Really lovely poetry - elegant and with a classical feel about it.
~ Nicolette
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The photo is gorgeous and so is your poem!
I don't know if it was your intention, but your poem has soft sensual tones. I guess that is what nature's beauty is, sensual...
Beautiful!
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Great imagery and sensual sensory metaphor. Entrancing word choices "let my curve redeem your oath" and "willing nimbus lips." I feel I'm missing out on understanding the last line.
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The rainbow is the symbol of promise that the whole earth will not be overtaken with flood....so for the earth to refuse the rainbow is to suggest that she WANTS to be flooded... in this metaphorical case, the speaker wants to be completely overtaken by her lover's passion. Does that make sense?
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Ah! Thank you, that makes perfect sense. My brain is just on the fritz!
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This is gorgeous!
I love every line of this and it is one of my favorite
things when nature is entwined with love and sensuality...
I love this
Ty for entering and for your support with our beautiful group! It is such a pleasure to have you
Lynda
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beautiful
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Beautiful
I hear the Mojave cry & know your name.
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if i am rain
"then torrential showers shall fall upon thee!" l.o.l. hey lady this is amazing..an incredible piece filled with detailed imagery that causes the reader's mind to go..south..
loved this entirely!!
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Such a grounded bug would shine
her wings of pollinating hum,
for she would be my rythm-drum on petal
come home, rejoicing storm, to be transformed;
this sacred drip to clease in sip,
what nature blooms
by stream at morning.
So very beautiful...
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