When did I go missing?
When did I become so obselete,
that even now you look right through
me, when I'm screaming out your name?
The last goodbye we ever said,
runs around my mind, doubting,
hoping you would change your mind,
hoping you would stay away,
so I could get to getting over you,
When did the autumn leaves fall through me,
the rain no longer drenches me,
the sun no longer warms me,
it no longer rises in your absence,
I can no longer be substantial,
and so I'll fade away,
In paradise we resided,
but only for a day,
it seems that's all we were given,
for some one else's sadistic gain,
you were snatched from my heart,
and in return I'm bleeding out,
upon your empty sheets,
Your world continues,
whilst mine is lying, broken,
I made myself believe that you
could be my happy ending,
and in return,
you rode off in to the sunset,
on your white horse,
without me,
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Comments
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Wow, I loved it. The first stanza really drew me in. I know what it's like to feel invisible to someone you care about and think that they could actually be what you were looking for. Amazing write!
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I often feel this way hun, I know how it feels when people just don't notice you, even though you scream at them, help them, be there for them... They still don't see you, you're like a ghost.
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For some strange reason I was reminded of Evanescence... I really liked this... you're opening line instantly caught my eye... I felt like you were talking me through a journey...
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Mmm lots of emotion in the words you chose to use. Nicely written. Sometimes we can make our own happy endings.
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you uh, misspelled 'world'..
but it's really good, wao
um loads of strong emotions, it's
brilliant
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excellent! luv it!
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