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(last untitled poem) untittled 5

Heart stops as the knife drops
Blood pour with screechy screams
People walk around with no open arms
He falls to the floor taking another shattered heart from the world

He was pushed too hard by so called friends
He hurt so much but people were saying its only a phase
No he is laying in the ground
Where bugs can rot his body

Author notes

If you can tell me if you liked the untittled series and if i should countinue it.... And always thank u

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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  • shattered.frisco
    July 6

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    A very strong ending, kind of scared me. Such pain, such anguish. Interesting and impressive.


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  • DeadLoveJess16
    June 12
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    i like it bro keep writing i wanna read more

  • Much-Dipstick
    June 12
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    beautiful! Aww you write soooo well =] ^^ I love your work, it's very feeling


  • Tadd
    June 12
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    fantasticly written

  • Xxpoison.kissesxX silver member
    June 12

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    Um, this poem was.... sensitive... It was good but... i dont know, lol. I won't even attempt to describe it, nicely written though nick:]


  • ScarsFade
    June 12

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    please continue it it's amazing one of your writing this...it works soo well with the feelings and these very real vivid images...please keep writing hun...much <3...scars.

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