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Where have all The Seagulls Gone?

Where have all the Seagulls gone?
I look and see nothing but a skeleton of what they once were

Blood from self inflicted wounds defile their once beautiful feathers
and a shadow of shame disables flight
They still want to fly, if only an illusion

Cast from some dark drug who’s name doesn’t matter
they’ve looked for love where one should never look
They of course never found it

They took what they could and called it Pride
but the shadow remained

I looked for spirit
and I found shame
I looked for laughter
and found a tainted mimic

I looked for happiness
only saw that same shadow
blocking the warmth of light

Just when I thought I should
give up and face reality
a few brightly squawking seagulls showed me hope

As I watched them fly off
through the shadow of shame
into the light
I knew I’d found the Seagulls

Author notes

uhhh... taffy.rox t a f f y r o x...


option #2- confuse me because no one has ever been able to accuratly inturprate this

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Comments

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  • kokonutz
    November 7

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    I think it's basically about how alot of kids do stupid things and destroy themselves.


  • PerVirtuous
    August 23
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    Interesting and emotional.


  • Diminished Capacity gold member
    August 7

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    This was confusing, but I have to say that I've actually enjoyed it. You did a wonderful job, thank for for entering, and best wishes to you.


  • SimplyNoodle
    August 3

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    I am not sure what this poem means, because there could be many meanings, it all depends on how the reader inturperts it.
    I see it as a very complex piece of work that really doesnt have a meaning, well at least not a spcific one. But just my thoughts.
    I love the flow of this and also the choice of words. Great work and continue writting. Iwish tyou the best of luck in the contest and appologiez for the commenting happending so late.

    Thank you.

    ~ Chelsey


  • HereComesTheSun
    July 28

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    P: the pondering feeling left with this poem really helps me enjoy this piece. the symbolism was extremely overwhelming (in a good way)

    suggestion: i know your prompt was to confuse but if that contest is over possibly write about what inspired or the meaning of this becuase for other contest the point is to understand the poem

    thanks for entering

    • The cliche typo
      July 28
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      well if i did that then people would stop guessing

      and it entertains me to see them guess lolz


  • jessica rabbit.
    July 28
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    Thank you so much for your entry.


  • dutch2lips gold member
    July 27
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    thank you for entering


  • rebel lips
    July 26
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    is this about going to the dentist?


  • Tqop
    July 23
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    Thank you for your entry.


  • Unbreakable3
    July 21

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    This is a random but intresting question that you used very very well, much better than i could've! Thank you for the entry


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    July 10

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    Very intiguing write you have penned
    Oh yes you sure confused me, yet I re read and absorbed the impact of words
    that showed an inner sadness and then something uplifting happened
    I like it
    Thank you and best wishes
    Julie


  • rainbows. gold member
    July 8
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    "This was highly confusing. I liked how this was abstract in meaning, yet one can file out their own images or interpertaions of it. Nicely done. Good job and good luck in the contest." I agree here. Haha. Thank-you very much for entering this piece into my contest.


  • Cyanide Dreams
    July 7

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    This was highly confusing I liked how this was abstract in meaning, yet one can file out their own images or interpertaions of it. Nicely done. Good job and good luck in the contest.

    Josh


  • Ami
    July 6

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    This confused me but I loved it!

    Thank you so much for entering my contest,
    And Good Luck!
    -♥Amy♥


  • redbarchettadrive gold member
    July 4
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    Very nice! Thanks for the entry!


  • jessifer1792
    July 4

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    good.

    hard to follow, as you probably knew from previous comments. good though.. thought provoking. nice metaphors.


  • Sin with a grin
    July 3
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    rating of title- 7/10
    rating of poem 9/10
    i thought it meant you looked for some penguins that had pride or something inside so they could fly....im not totally positive but you were loooking for it and fouund it.
    i think this poem was great and not a poem you see over and over ya know
    thanks for sharing
    Meg

    • The cliche typo
      July 3
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      wrong

      lol did you even read it (no offense)


      • Sin with a grin
        July 4

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        i did lol but i think you probley could have been a bit more clear....well i read it once more and now i think it means they want to be born again so they can fly idk lol in a strange way i like it just am totally confused by it

        • The cliche typo
          July 4
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          its not about seagulls as people

          they are kids who go to my school (segals is my school mascot)


          • Sin with a grin
            July 4
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            ok. well i still liked it even if it confused me lol
            oh and told like alot of other groups to join this group


            • The cliche typo
              July 4
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              thanx

              sweeeet i juts got one for the heart breaker one (i'm to lazy to do sticky caps lol)


  • Kathleen a Nazarene
    July 3

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    A write

    filled with imagery, passion, metaphor & anguish. I liked the hope at the end of this. This has so many illusions that many meanings can be attributed. Bravo for a write that makes you think & is written well.

    • The cliche typo
      July 27
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      you were the one that helped me edit this poem right?

      i was wondering if you would be interested in editing a story for me...


  • StillLovingYou
    July 3

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    Rating of title-(10/10)
    Rating of poem-(8/10)
    What you think the poem means- i think it means that you were looking for you classmates that had pride for your school but you could find none.
    what you think- this is a great poem! keep writing!!


  • Maggie Kay gold member
    June 26
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    lol this is so cool
    keep it up
    kmp


  • Antebellum
    June 25
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    wow this was amazing.
    wonderfully written.

    thanks for entering.
    goodluck


  • Sempre da soli
    June 20
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    it was very good and ican tell it has meaning to u in some way keep up the good work.. good luck


  • my.stars.dont.shine
    June 19

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    interesting take on the prompt. different and beautiful. i like it. thanks for entering and good luck!

  • XxLoverOfDarknessxX
    June 18

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    this was a really amazing poem!! i loved it! it left me speechless which is a hard thing to do. LOVED IT!! nice work keep it up! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!


  • XxXNoxiousRoseXxX
    June 18

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    Wow! This is powerful and such a great read! I have nothing to pick at: no misspelling or grammatical errors that I picked up. Please, keep writing so I can keep on reading!


  • amethyst24
    June 14
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    wow nice work^^ best of luck in the contest


  • cazzy71
    June 13

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    100% PERFECT

    A great thank you for submitting this piece,it stands out from the others as it is so different,so well phrased.All of the entries so far have been brilliant,and this is no exception,except to say it is beyond sensational. I feel you could pen something for my other current contest,in Personal and about jealousy,it is titled Jealousy has a capital J.I will not be judging until late June,but I have just added you to finalists list.


  • Kira65
    June 11
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    A very good poem, it has a great flow! a very good first post, way better then mine!


  • individuality gold member
    June 11

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    a splendid show of talent created here with your poem, it delights and surprises this particular reader and makes me want to smile for the rest of this fine sunny day, perhaps i shall do exactly that, yes i think i shall. romance dances in the eye of love as ribbons of pleasure swirl. thank you kindly for sharing and enjoy the rest of your day.

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