Leave me alone
The haunting thought I cannot control
I'm in a cave
I cannot escape
Let me be
And my spirit be free
My mind
The door it cannot find
I try
To climb out of my misery
Please,God,have some sympathy
So taunting is this thought
I want my emotions to rot
Change myself completely
Reach in and grasp the heart of me
No other feeling so immense
All these emotions so tense
From the pit that is sane
I cry the Lord's prayer in vain
Leave me alone
My realistic thoughts I cannot control
Let me be
SO my wrath can be seen
My mind
It's sense it cannot find
I'm in a cave
Trapt in my own self hate
Author notes
These was written on one of those days when I was feeling like shit.Yeah maybe PMS.
Written March 15th, 2004
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beautiful poem. v.deep.
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I wasn't on my rag,but thanx you make me feel alot better.My family was being really stupid.I like the whole "British talk"(just lovely).I don't think I was on anything.I was just pissed off my ass.
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awesome!!
OMG!!!! grl, this is the bestest poem ever. why didnt you tell me when you were gonna write another poem . . .i would have red it alot sooner. lol, now that i look . .it was posted 2 hrs ago. ne wayz . .this poem is sooo good. keep up the good work grl!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! 
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PMS hey? Me Teacher , Bowwers , says that there is no such thing. I say screw and wisk the bat to hell. Well on to the poem yeah? Kay I have Three things to say. Wow you must've be mad , I'll make sure not to touch you with a ten foot pole when your on the rag and What were you on? This is pretty good and I'll prolly cry myself to sleep now. G'night!
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Whoa! this is really really good. You can feel the anger and the emotion in it so well. you did a great job on wording this and everything! i can relate to it well! Kick booty write!
Stay strong and write on
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This does have that dark edge to it. Then again, seems as though it's just what you were striving for to give to us. The imagery you used works very very well in this piece. You gave us a clear picture as to what your theme is and carried it through to the end.
The form looks a bit strange to me. It does also work. For some reason the staggering verse structure isn't my style - but it certainly is something you've used well to weave your words upon the page.
Nicely done my friend. It's interesting, well voiced and you show us it's something that's all your own.
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i like... the second stanza or whatever is different from the first and third... you prolly meant to do that of course but i enjoyed reading the first and third better... i like overall good write... keep it up ..
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sonia,this kicks serious arse! girl this is bold and awesome! raw emotional and intense! you did a superb job on expression here,sounds a lil sad and angry maybe even depressed,but you potrayed your feelings beautifully,the poem is excellent,and glad you got past your writters block and penned and new one it was well worth the wait. awesome
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what she said, it is a very powerful pice and i liked it alot! TTYL!
- Jaguar ;~)
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powerful. been there and you capture those feelings very well.
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