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Jealousy

I am jealous, and that’s a part of me-
I cannot rid, the hate I feel.
The burning anger that rises up,
The aching pain that cannot stop.
It is her, and him and that girl,
The demons that just make me hurl.
It is that, and this, and it’s my bad
That everyone thinks that I am mad.

I am jealous, of simply everything,
The lack of fun, of love, of anything.
The translucent tears that don’t fall,
And you, that upset me, above it all.
Everything I thought, it isn’t true,
The love, the magic, out it blew,
And then came something new,
It was the Devil, it was you…

Author notes

This is a poem with pain based on jealousy- about one who cannot be what she desired- but yet not written in a too suicidal way... I hope you enjoy it,
luv Sweet-Sins
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  • Kathraina silver member
    October 5

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    Very strong emotions invoked in this write! Good imagery and flow throughout this piece. Interesting read


    bravo and thank you for entering




    ♥ kate


  • Antebellum
    September 2

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    wonderful take on jealousy.
    amazing rhyme.
    thank you for taking the time to enter
    good luck


  • humblpye gold member
    July 24
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    Well I'm glad it's a contest entry, and to that end you did a really good job
    hit the devil right on the head well done!


  • januaryrain gold member
    June 23

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    Excellent portrayal of jealousy, an emotion I believe everyone has felt at one time or another. Though if you get comsumed by it, as some do, it can have devastating effects.
    Well done


  • cazzy71
    June 12

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    Hit the right note

    Your take on the prompt was spot on,well done,an interesting entry,thats fascinatingly brilliant. I feel you could contribute to my other current contest.its about regret and is in the heading feelings.Round of applause for this gem though,I love it,lots.

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