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The Strike of Awe

FLASH!!
The storm rages on.
It has been building in intensity
From the moment it began.
The storm surges, the wind rages,
Waves rock while thunder crashes,
FLASH!!
Lightning bursts forth from the sky
Lighting up the world with its brilliance.
Clouds continue forming over both land and sea,
Hiding the night sky and showing only the wrath of the storm.
Very distantly, the setting sun is barely visible
Waving farewell to the world and entrusting it's safety
To the moon for the night.
FLASH!!
The glory and magnificence of the lightning strike
Leaves all who see it staring in awe.
The city is deserted.
All the people in it are inside their homes with their families
Watching the storm from a safe place,
Yet almost afraid to stop watching.
Incredible lightning displays continue to break forth from the night sky
Lighting the world once again.
Breaking off into many branches,
Some striking the ground below.
Others content themselves to singe the air
And tear apart the clouds.
FLASH!
The world stares.
Flash!
The storm is ending.
As the clouds break up and
Begin to go along on their way,
The moon shines brightly forth.
The storm has moved on
And the earth below is safe once more.
All is peaceful and calm,
Yet still filled with awe
Over the splendor and might of
The strike.

Author notes

#2 picture. Thank you for the amazing picture Samplette. I love watching lightning storms. Some of them are absolutely incredible.

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  • Midnite-Rae
    July 31

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    I love the imagery in this. I love storms. "Lightning bursts forth from the sky
    Lighting up the world with its brilliance.
    Clouds continue forming over both land and sea,
    Hiding the night sky and showing only the wrath of the storm." I love that part. You did a wonderful job with this. I really enjoyed reading it. Thanks for entering and Good luck in my contest.


  • ajocean silver member
    July 21
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    interesting

    very nice piece keep it coming and goodluck in the contest.


  • Antebellum
    July 20

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    amazing decription here,
    love how you repeat 'flash'
    thanks for taking the time to enter,
    good luck.


  • Blue-Rose Beauty
    July 15
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    You have a way with words

    Very descriptive and pretty. I felt like I was there watching.

    Overall grade: 6

    Thanks for entering.


  • Antebellum
    July 10
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    Thanks so much for taking the time to enter my contest,
    I will review this more efficently if you are added to the finalists.
    Good luck.

    [It sees I have commented this once before...you probably wont win with this, since ive read it]


  • xxuglyducklingxx
    July 7

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    Breathtaking Imagery.

    You are rather good at metaphorical images. I really like your style. This is an exceptionally amazing piece for it's genre. Very nicely done. Penned by knowledge and growth definitely. Brava.


  • Antebellum
    July 5
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    "The storm rages on.
    It has been building in intensity
    From the moment it began.
    The storm surges, the wind rages,
    Waves rock while thunder crashes,
    FLASH!!
    Lightning bursts forth from the sky
    Lighting up the world with its brilliance."

    wow stunning imagery.
    thanks for entering.


  • Samplette gold member
    June 17

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    I really like this. Your strong words kept me captivated...as a lightning storm does. Very well crafted. Thank you so much for entering the contest.
    Sam


  • PhoenixFaith
    June 11

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    WOW..and I say again WOW!!! Never tell me that you cannot write freeverse!! This is absolutely amazing!! And I am really loving the whole thing. The imagery and the repetition that you use is amazing..you must have some good English teachers teaching you these things... You are growing so much every time you write.

    Always write from the heart
    Never give up
    Kate


  • spiritraven
    June 11

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    Wow

    So much imagery and you can almost hear the sounds and see the lightning. So well done. Words that explode thank you for sharing

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