Captivating, mesmerising, ti's what you are.
you sparkle and shine like a twinkling star.
Dangling in limbo thine own self unsure,
don't thy know it is you I adore?
Take my hand I'll lead you away,
even if it is just for one day.
We will visit the moon,
we shall visit the sun,
and the forces will know that we have won.
They pull us down they make us weak,
breaking us down they know who are the meek.
Come to me, come to me dear fellow,
for I have love in my heart to bestow.
What did you think
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Beautifull poem..so soft..inviting..alluring.Wonderfull, from start to finish.This held my attention...good for you..I am beginning to acquire a taste for rhyming. thanks for the write
John
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A very warm and endearing story of love at it's best.
Flows very nicely from begining to end.
I like your background picture also.
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Very Good
They pull us down they make us weak,
breaking us down they know who are the meek.
Come to me, come to me dear fellow,
for I have love in my heart to bestow
This is well done
I don`t usally like rhyme
Very well said soft words
Rick
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BEAUTIFUL!!!!
Such a touching and beautiful way to welcome new friendships.
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hi there...i loved the below two lines
'Dangling in limbo thine own self unsure,
don't thy know it is you I adore?'
reallyyy really nice....its like the heart is speaking to someone known!! cheeers... -
pretty verses and romantic images.
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Wonderful...
A romantic mellifluous flower to feed the hummingbirds of love, and to enchant and strike the heart that pumps love... "Come to Me" sings with a majestic sublime voice diffusing the musicality of love.
In respect and admiration,
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
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Ok let's go. This is awsome very beautiful
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If flows very nicely...
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Now this is captivating, it would not take much to make this rhyme sing
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Beautiful
i really like the rhyme and flow in this piece nicely presented well done. -
To bestow a come hither, is the essential quality in a somewhat iconic value, that some women claim by right. A noble of all accounts, gratitude to deliver a sequence of equality I feel with a man, to whom like for like is determined. I feel by this that you are a good listener as well as a good speaker. Anyone who has a quaint heart will use the words, 'meek', 'weak', and bestow in their works. There is no ounce of melodrama in this piece, as it always did look promising fulfillment anyway to have a heart like yours. "Thine own self unsure,?" I don't think so, it's a kind man who will qualify to token all that is offered and to return an equity far more worth to wrangle. Excellent.
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this is just brilliant and soulful piece...it is even more sweeter than the honey! i really enjoyed it...
my favourite lines:
"Take my hand I'll lead you away,
even if it is just for one day.
We will visit the moon,
we shall visit the sun,
and the forces will know that we have won."
Thank you...all the best..
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A lovely poem. No matter how many times people say it, it's never enough. It's just up to all of us to try and find new ways to say it.
If this is written for someone specific I would imagine they are pleased with it.
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How soft and beautiful this is, like a lullaby
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Beautiful
You write so beautifully. I love the imagery you use - everything flows so effortlessly... -
This is a very beautiful piece!! it goes wonderfully with the background as well.
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A very beautiful piece of writing here. Very classy and loving. I like your rhyme and the flow of the piece. Very well done.
Dark Wishes
Wayne Leon
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Ah..like a river in the hills you are moving your words with all your honety and the beauty of your soul..lucky is the guy..a apoem which can re-live the dead even..I am smiling ..thanks for sharing the universal sentiments of the life..
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Stunning
I absolutely love it... the poem flowed from beginning to end.
"Dangling in limbo thine own self unsure,
don't thy know it is you I adore?"
A beautiful write!!!
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This was amazing. You pulled a 180 from the one you write before and wrote something about loving deeply. Brilliant.
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