My life is a paradox, my life is a paradox
A group of statements that lead to a contradiction
Or maybe just a situation which defies intuition
I see it everyday; it’s clearly in my vision
But for some reason my retinas refuse recognition
My mind is a paradox, my mind is a paradox
Sometimes the term is used for situations that are simply surprising
Sometimes my hand just jots jibberish without me realizing
All of these abnormal absurdities are absolutely true
But my brain barely blemish’s, if you only knew.
My school is a paradox, my school is a paradox
The harder I try, the less I achieve
The more I learn, the less I believe
Cram and cram for the never ending test
Exam after exam, who did the best?
My friends are a paradox, my friends are a paradox
The worse I treat them, the more they like me
My enemies are more trustworthy, more than likely
Fake, describes or implies something which is not real
The more people I touch around me, the less I feel
My work is a paradox, my work is a paradox
The more I do the more errors I’m accountable for
Less effort equals more praise, no more being pure
They give me money in which I just give to someone else
I find it funny, us working people, so insulse ?
My family is a paradox, my family is a paradox
Bound by blood, no ropes besides that
Holidays are humorous, come observe the combat
Heartfelt insults and gentle thoughtful screaming
Hated loved ones, unthoughtfully scheming
My world is a paradox, my world is a paradox
Fat people fed, scrawny people starved
Assholes get power, saints get carved
The rich get paid, the poor get to pay
A baby growing up fatherless is now to cliché
My love is a paradox, my love is a paradox
I neglect the one I love the most, and adore the unimportant
I try to improve, but still I just lay dormant
I expect the best, but give the worst
My love would flourish if it were reversed
I am a paradoxx, I am a paradoxxx
Straight edge as an X, but as crooked as the next
Misconstrued as intelligent, but really I’m perplexed
Always speak my mind, but it’s taken out of context
Pretext to be annexed by my self forming hex.
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Please give feedback, this is the first rough copy. It just came out, help me improve it!
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Oh yes...quite nice. The diction, while definitely abstract, is very, very clever, leaving me nothing but curious and a bit disappointed in you...
...I mean, seriously, could you not have made it at least a little longer?
Joking of course (unless you agree), I think you've got some wonderful talent with a quill (or a keyboard, whatever...) and I really hope you stop writing on the day they nail your coffin shut, and no sooner.
I am impressed. A lot.
IC C
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This is very complex and abstract.
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Astounding!!
This poem would have to be one of the most brilliant poems I have ever read...ever! I am so impressed and befuddled by your work. This piece is so true with every word written. I especially love the stanza about family...SO TRUE! You are wise beyond your years! Thanks for asking me to read this one, I would be very upset if I had missed it. And thanks for all the comments on my poems, it means a lot to me!
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Holidays are humorous, come observe the combat
Heartfelt insults and gentle thoughtful screaming
Hated loved ones,
Heh My Favoite part...
So I made up a new word to describe your poem...
Your poem ia Spaztastic...
I nearly had a spaz attack because it was so fantastic!
I am not really one to say what you need to fix... Cause there is none.
Heh,
You're horribly great.
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nicely done nicely done thank you for sharing
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wow the rhymin here flowed amazingly i sure wouldnt be able to rhyme like that...and it all made sense...for a rough copy i dont think it needs any changes
i love it how it already is
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Wow I really Really like this one the rhyming is awesome and the meaning is amazing Wow..
Thank you for entering my contest Good luck
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WOW. This was really good! spectacular emotions in this! awesome job with this piece! nice rhyme to this as well. Keep up thegood work! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!
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This is a great write and I am not sure I can say anything to justify it.
You have written so many truths within it, some gave me giggles, some
made me think, others just brought back memories of old. But most all affected
me in one way or another. An all around fabulous write that kept my interest
from beginning to end and that is saying a lot given the length of this poem.
I wish you the best of luck in not only this contest but the many others you have it entered in.
Suzi
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hmmmm
something tells me i've read this before.. lol! it's a good thing i still love it!!
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Excellent concept and a really cool rhyme scheme. If I had written it I would have been a little more strict with regard to syllable structure, but differences make the world go 'round =) Good job.
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Many a time have I thought about life being a paradox. Thank you for entering my contest and kindest of regards.
Sophie
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Less effort equals more praise - dang lucky you
Holidays are humorous, come observe the combat - omg the family holidays, what you wrote is so true.... I hate going, sometimes its not so bad thank god..
I expect the best, but give the worst - yeah we do the opposite the others sometimes, they give 100 you give 50, beats the heck out of me lol
Nice write, this is how I write, it just comes out, Im not even sure I make sense sometimes lol. This is good the way it is. I wouldnt change anything.
~Donna
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There is not one thing I would change in this write. So powerful that it stured within my heart. A great write indeed.
Poetic Hearts
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This was one of the best writes I read today. So truthful and beautifully written.
Loved the 'my friends', 'my family' and 'my love' verses. They meant something to me. Great write, keep it up.
Love
~Noor
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So true
Man, there is so much truth within this one write that it makes my mind hurt! My favorite stanzas are:
5-TRUTH! I hear you! I thought I saw a typo in the last line. But just a quick google search and... you actually TAUGHT me a word, my friend! Instant three claps. You don't know how long it's been!
7-Truth I LIVED! I FEEL you on this one! Preach it from the street level if they won't give you a pulpit!
Man... I'll be keeping an eye on this cat...
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this is great. i honestly dont think it needs to be improved. you're a great writer and obviously more intelligent than most people. most people live their lives in the shadow, not realizing what we have to deal with. i know people still consider me a kid, but i was raised to understand things that go on in this world and have been through to much for my age.. so i see where you're coming from by writing this.. i love your writing.. so keep it up. im happy to know there are people like me out there..
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You weren't supposed to enter prewrites without asking me, and it doesn't fit any of my prompts and it followed none of my rules. I'm going to DQ it although it has potential, it needs more imagery and emotion though. Also, diction! What's a paradox, and I felt some of the rhyme was a little forced?
It has potential to be really great but needs work.
I liked the last stanza the best but the hex kinda ruined the rhyme.
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Amazed
Wow, I love the creativity in this poem!! There are no words to describe how this poem made my jaw drop. You have an amazing outlook on life and I'm glad for you. Good job and keep it flowing.
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You will be my friend. Great poem you penned here. Keep at it. I like the message you gave here. Thank you for entering and good luck.
Michael
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wow that was fantastic!
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this is brilliant, i love the part about your family.
mine is the same way, and my cousin and i (the only nice people) sit and just watch them at thanksgiving, hoping whoever is butchering the poor turkey isn't offended.
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very good
I love it
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oh you are so my new favorite!! lol this is really cool I love it! and I totally read it with some interesting music in the background(in my head). (think Jack Johnson-ish)
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Outstanding
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Incredible
The more people i touch around me the less i feel. the dpeth of that is painfully honest, amazing work.
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Great write.. keep up the good work
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This is pefect and so true it makes me laugh out loud. A PT is a wonderful calling .
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i like dis one
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I really like this! Nice job!
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Wonderful wording on this piece and nice repetition. I really enjoyed your words on this one, it was put together well.
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Well thought out and expressed to show the irony of life which often flows silently and chosen to be ignored. A bold write and complete in its delivery. Well done...alby
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I think the ideas behind this are wonderful... you see the world through compassionate eyes - and that is admirable.
I think though, that you are limiting yourself with the rhyme. Some of the most powerful things that you will ever read are free prose. Pieces without pattern and guidelines can often bring the reader to create their own... and that in turn forms a deeper connection between the audience and your work.
That is my only suggestion - other than that, I love it!
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Hmmm... Good write, I very much enjoyed the beginning. I found the poem a bit too lenthgy, too drawn out. However, I am a bit of a minimalist, good job though
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Awesome write John, your writing justifies your user name...looking forward to more writes, I believe life in general is a paradox, and we are continuely making choices...my favorite line is; The more I learn, the less I believe ...even at my age, I learn something new everyday, still on my toes and trying to dance...tripping occasionally...hang in there and let the ink flow...adding you to my favorites...cheers, Leaf
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yes. this is awesome. glad i popped over here and read this. might have to peek at others you wrote!
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A great great great write!!!!
Just superb!
an amazing line -All of these abnormal absurdities are absolutely true
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i wish i could come up with some great cretive comment to tell you how wonderful this poem is but i cant so im just going to tell you how wonderful this poem is... its wonderful
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wow!
now this is raw.
and i love that.
I hate long poetry...
I love long poetry that keeps me reading.
Alot of the stuff you mentioned was very true as well which i think adds to the whole thing. It was honest and pure; something so few people are able to convey in their poetry without the use of hiding it.
well done on a great write!
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A very interesting and thought provoking write. I liked you poem very much
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It Was Deep. Very Deep. It Was Honest And Full Of Emotion. This Poem Came From The Heart. I Don't See Any Improvement Needed. I Don't Think It Is Necessary. So Keep Them Coming Can't Wait To Read More. Bless It Be. -
your words are filled with such deep emotions and a showing of how a paradox can inter in most anywhere there is life...i wouldn't change it at all for it flows from your heart...thank you kindly for sharing it with me
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very good poem. I like how the whole thing fits together and becomes complete. I agree with vickie rosa, it’s an intelligent write
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Thats great with lines like
The more I learn, the less I believe and Straight edge as an X, but as crooked as the next I couldn't look away from the screen. -
hey. im on my cousin's profile and she showed me your poem. All i can really say is "wow" you're truely talented. This was really deep and i can relate. Anyways... nice work man. <3 Becky =
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cool dude, oh and thx for the comment on "Blood Drop Hearts"!! feel free to comment on my other poems too. =)
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I love that you actually wrote a poem about this word. My oldest daughter is always telling me how much she loves to use the word "paradox" You did a great job keeping me interested in this. Thanks for sharing your talent.
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that was very impressive... usually people only make and lines rhyme but you took it even further. I am very impressed... good work!
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I really liked this. I think you could use a stronger first stanza but it got better and better and the end was wonderful. I like the rhyming style, how it is different in different stanzas. The point you make comes across as well and is not hidden. Personally I would like to see a colorful metaphor here and there, but that's just me
Otherwise great poem
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INTELLIGENT WRITE
INTELECTUALY STIMULATING.
LOVED IT. I loved the last paragragh.
look foward to reading more.
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amazing!!
this poem is pure genius!! i love how you wrote it and it seems as if everyone is a paradox. i can feel the confusion and discovery as i read the words! i'm honestly dumbfounded at the moment and it's hard to formulate the words to fit. but thank you for joining the group and if you don't mind, could i post your poem?
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Thank u!! Your opinion helps a lot, I would be honored to have you post it!! I'm new so I have like no clue how this site works, but I'm working on it.. lol.
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