She illuminates the sky,
Taking every breath away,
She flies and soars so high,
Higher than anything that flies in night or day.
Taking every breath away,
She gallops on lands,
Then takes off in the dusky grey,
Beneath her, lay fields of green, seas and sands.
She gallops on lands,
More swift than an Arabian horse;
Beneath her, lay fields of green, seas and sands,
Upon her, none can laws, enforce.
More swift than an Arabian horse,
She gallops and rides,
Upon her, none can laws, enforce,
She is a Star that never hides.
She gallops and rides,
Like no creature ever seen before,
She is a Star that never hides,
Her essence lies in every heart’s core.
Like no creature ever seen before,
She sets herself free in the arms of the world,
Her essence lies in every heart’s core,
She is a beauty, by the night, unfurled.
She sets herself free in the arms of the world,
She is a special, unique and genuine Star,
She is a beauty by the night, unfurled.
She is the wondrous Night Star.
She is a special, unique and genuine Star,
Too all eyes, she is a Unicorn,
She is the wondrous Night Star,
With a colourful mane and tail, and a silvery horn.
Too all eyes, she is a Unicorn,
She flies and soars so high,
With a colourful mane and tail, and a silvery horn;
She illuminates the sky.
By: Nada Adel Sobhi
A contest entry
- Prewriten poetry - rhyme only by Sonja.
4250 points, ended July 17, 11 entries
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This is a really brilliant poem. I love the pink writing on the pure black backdrop! Nicely done, the poem was fantastic like a picture. I loved it thanks so much for enterin
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I am not familiar with this poetical form but it is obvious that you put a lot of energy and knowledge to this very complex poem. Thank you.
~Sonja~
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Well, you have most certainly taken many liberties with the pantoum form, but having said that this is a most splendid fantasy adventure very well penned, indeed!
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Well Done
I think the pantoum is the most challenging poetic form to write. I like how your poem maintains its cohesiveness. Sometimes pantoums have a mind of their own and tend to go in their own direction. In my first book of poetry, "Poems On Some Parables Of Christ," I wrote a pantoum called "Leaves of Prophecy." For my third book, I'm trying to expand that poem from 68 lines to 2,400 lines. Do you, by chance know, what the world record is for the longest pantoum? harrispoems
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i like it really..nice poem frankly..i like the last two stanzas and the repetetion adds so much to the poem reveals a gr8 talent..good luck and keep it up
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It was long and I don't have a very big attention span, but I made it through with no problem. You did an amazing job. I love this poem. Especially the first stanza.
Keep up the awesome work.
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I swear your trying to make me pass out!
And your correct I do like it
Its lovely so is unicorn you portray.
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