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Detide

Formless

Void

Retreated away

Missing the connection that holds it together

Concious but empty

All understanding floating through the door

Realisation an atomic bomb

Concrete walls and straw houses

simply blown away

Smiles faded

Rejoicing lost

All understanding flown away

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  • a u r a
    July 21

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    I like the way you have drawn parallels between emotions and the tide-relationships-sitautions and the tide-of course it is purely my interpretations-the entire poem has been crafted very well- I have enjoyed it a great bunch