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Making Love the Old Fashioned Way ( Gold )

Animated I draw conclusive

three dimensional angles,

yet the lines always bend in the middle,

wavering like a hovercraft on upturned tides.

 

Quivering wrecks sunk ship,

I want to be floating,

aimlessly

drunk.

 

 

Spinning the deck,

wheels anchor the oars

dizzy heights reach orgasmic,

oiling the engine...

 

and I drown.....

 


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10. How to Make Love While Conscious

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  • fallendust
    October 25

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    Great imagery displayed here! I enjoyed this one alot. Orgasmic has always been one of many words I am fond of. It has an interesting ring to it in my opinion so I loved that you incorporated it in your poem! You write beautifully!


  • indigent
    August 7
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    its the motion of the ocean
    good write
    i sometimes forget sex with love


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    August 1

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    Beautifully penned as always Sis!!!

    Wonderful imagey filled narrative that flows with grace & metaphor, making for a compelling read that enthrals throughout...
    Keep up the good work...
    Well done!!!


  • Garmond gold member
    July 23
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    And don't we all? Great expression here and much stated with few words. Clever.


  • Coathanger
    July 10
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    an interesting style..


  • perfectsunset gold member
    June 26

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    ASTONISHING.

    Passionate in such a different
    context of sensuality.. you truly
    "dived" into this one.. with no
    fears, and constructed something
    so out-of-the-box brilliant.

    I LOVE everything about this
    piece and how you brought
    making love, to the seas.

    I'm sure there are plenty
    of ways to digest or
    dissect this piece.

    P.S. -->> love the background.

    Best of luck & thanks for entering


    • Reptile Lady gold member
      June 26
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      OMG thanks hun
      I loved writing this piece
      been a while since I wrote sensual
      love ya xx


  • Candyknife gold member
    June 12

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    wow

    this brings a nice image while readin and an interesting way of describing this, very good write a pleasure to read


  • Rejected Easter Egg
    June 12

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    Wow. That was powerful and I don't think I've ever experienced anything like that sadly.


  • Heroesrox
    June 10

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    Tee hee. Sensual write here, hon! Awesome work. Thanks so much for sharing this one, Julie! Hugs and best wishes in the contest!


  • daviscth silver member
    June 10

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    Once again sis, this is brilliant writing!! You have really given your prompt life! I love the ending line. It ties the entire piece together perfectly. Good luck in the contest.


  • maralisa silver member
    June 10

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    aw sis a wonderful write I love your imagery and depth throughout good luck inthe contestsis

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