hide me, surround me
by the unknown truth,
take away these shackles
from my tender hands
come on
lets pretend
that it doesn't hurt
show the world
we are fine, that
we survived regardless
of what they said
simply because we know
how to blow each other away
cause we can breathe
let's merge together
create fusion
explode the lies
to pieces
by the greatness formed
between you&me
feel the wind
caressing our face
freely
Author notes
Prompt: picture "feel free" by Hermyone
30-80 words
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There was a need for truth spilled onto this page. It seems that those who are miserable, want everyone around them to hurt so, they let lies untangle and engulf. Your words were well chose and depict a desire for two being joined to create a net to protect from outside forces. Excellent!
Much Love & Respect ♥
Renee
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Nicely written, a well thought out look at the picture. Nice form and flow that keeps the reading smooth and interesting. A great way to look at the inner soul of the picture.
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Very nice work. It's really interesting and deep. Keep up the good work.
God Bless.
Matt.
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Oh wow, what a wonderful
take on the prompt, most
definitely. You made well
the use of words and ideas.
Good job!
Best of luck & thanks for entering
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Nicely taken on the prompt. I felt you expressed good ideas and the structure of the pome was really good. However, I wish I could have seen more imagery. Show us, don't tell us. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Josh
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