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The Lure.

Missing image

Am I the only fish in this ocean

that goes head first for that lure

with it's dazzling shining beauty

I swim towards it for a cure.

 

I can't seem to free my urges

this bait is way too good

I know I will regret it

if I bite this unforbidden food.

 

But hunger is  a void

in my case it is a crime

and I return to take a nibble

at this lure every time.

 

I know some day I'll get hooked

and the Angler won't let me free

but I continue taking chances

on the other side of me.

 

So I swim here in the current

in the tide of a lonely mind

and battle against the waves

from that lure who keeps me confined.

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Great Lakes Alive!!

    What a great take on the prompt (I hate the cliche' sound of that phrase)... But really, the image is what takes the poem where it lands, right into the "lured" depths of the blue fantasy of mind candy... Well, it's what it seems like to me, anyway; and your words carry it out splendidly!! Wishing you all the best in the contest; keep that muse's lure flowing!! Slán xx Cyn xx


  • crowd
    June 10

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    Real nice poem..But, I think it landed at the wrong airport. (ifyouknowwhatImean). Try not to get "lured" into the wrong contests. I give you 3, and have a nice day

  • Great entry and take on the prompt--
    Well Done & Best of luck in the contest!

  • kendhal22
    June 9
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    Nice

    Nice on the prompt. Love the imagery and brevity was excellent. Kendhal22

  • Loved it C


  • peaceimout
    June 9

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    Wonderful flow and excellent take on the given prompt! I don't think I have ever heard of love/temptation being captured quite like this. The word arrangement is brilliant. Great work and a joy to read, best of luck in the contest

    • Thank you....
      Just uploaded a pic as you requested in the contest page. again thank you.
      dolores x

  • Wow, well rhymed and aptly spoken. Let me know, if you need any one to cut the line for ya...

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