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Universal Shift

Altering course

to our parallel universe~

 

with water in my eyes...
I watched and you didn't fall,
and all the stars blinked the same.

 

Remembering to swallow
steps falter tripping through
unfamiliar tomorrow's.

 

Author notes

Prompt: 'if i knew where i was going, i'd be there'

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  • Swan song gold member
    November 25
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    Again a lovely loely poem!!! congrats to the silver well deserved


  • penman gold member
    June 18
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    Wonderful

    So very well done. And such a perfect take on the prompt. Congratulations on the silver.


  • DeJaBlue
    June 10

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    It seems lately that all of my tomorrows are unfamiliar ... wonderfully written, so much depth and intensity


  • Kathraina silver member
    June 10

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    Oh wow, this piece is absolutely lovely!
    Brilliant take on the prompt, there is such beauty here.
    Bravo


    ♥ Kate


  • Pure Thought silver member
    June 9
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    Well written, congrats on silver.

    I don't need a shift all my tomorrows are WTF.


  • perfectsunset gold member
    June 9

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    Wow this was stunning.
    A most amazing take on
    the prompt. Congrats on
    the silver

  • Nicole Hanna
    June 9

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    I'm a fan of short poetry, and the middle stanza you have there IS the poem. Those three lines are absolutely wonderful... so much so, you don't even need anything else.


  • Cannonsfire
    June 9

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    Some tomorrow's make us fear them but it's often the right move..I can understand this one C


  • PerfectImperfection
    June 9

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    Wow... There is such an intensity to this, coursing steadily through. The initial emotion surge alone - was amazing. Very well penned take to the prompt - from imagery to presence.. Best wishes in the contest!

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