Crack my heart open
watch it break, watch it bleed
I commit these selfless actions
for your selfish needs
Body cletched in agony
Perhaps it's just a dream
Perhaps one day I'll wake up
No, it's exactly how it seems
Tears darkening shadows
you cast over me
I said I'd love you till I died
Oh the irony
Pictures flashing under eyelids
My life in black and white
Blurred visions of your face
make it seem alright
Ah! A call from the dead
A pain so immense
I hear your voice in my ears
but nothing's making sense
One final blow to the heart
One last tear to shead
One last mumbled "I love you"
Before I'm finally dead
You'll put the roses on my grave
and watch them turn to black
I'm now nothing but a memory
and you're never looking back
The angels will meet my soul
And usher me through heaven's door
Just another victim when you whispered
"I don't love you anymore."
Author notes
The part in italics is kind of like an "extended ending."
There's no story behind this one. (Like most of the time.)
A k i - K o m o r i u t a
A contest entry
- Embracing the Night by Night Terrors.
400 points, ended August 4, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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very good very emotional I really liked it thanks for entering
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I love this so much. The first stanza holds much emotion and imagery. The flow was great and the rhyme was nice.
Good luck in the contest! 
Dax
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Excellent
This one was full of hate. I liked how the end line was just like bam. Just another victim when you whispered i don't love you anymore. Pure genius I enjoyed this one. Their was some rhyming but, it flowed real good. I liked this I really did you got some pent up pain man. Let it out. Just let it out. ^^
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