All in the dark of night the forest wept
For secrets of a silent nature kept
Within the thorns that strangle out the day
Her restless heart had faded quite away
And though the moonlight shone with heart of gold
As alabaster white her hands enfold
An apple red, an apple deep in hue
Where vile poison seeps it's liquid through
And ne'er a shadow walks as yet to part
The suffocating ivy from her heart
As clouds drift by like ghosts across the moon
And whistling wind plays out it's haunting tune
No breath escapes her full and ruby lips
As dew from grasses all around her drips
Keeping steady rhythm in the night
A million jewels caught in pale starlight
But winters ice burns deep within her soul
That's fading fast within this wretched hole
In ice glass coffin laid on velvet blue
The maiden sleeps awaiting heart that's true
Author notes
I've used the following in my poem:
Personification (Example line 1)
Hyperbole (Example line 16)
Metaphor (Example line 5)
Simillie (Example line 11)
Symbolism (Example line 6 Alabaster white for death)
Onomatop (Example line 12)
Oxymoron (Example line 17)
Repetition (Example line 7)
These were included as this was an assignment for a class.
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Enchanting
Beautiful haunting imagery, you have carved a very vivid picture which i found enchanting and spell binding. thankyou
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So glad you liked this one. This is an old favourite cartoon, which I have given a more gothic feel here. Thank you for your lovely words.
Lianonsidhe
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this is such an excellently well crafted piece i like it very much indeed its simply enchanting
bravo
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Thank you dearest friend! I loved the old Disney cartoon of this story!
I have a few friends who refer to me as Snow White, because of my long dark hair and love of long skirts! It's quite funny really! lol
Lianonsidhe
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Not only a teacher, but a student too. One that shows eloquence throughout this write in a classical styling.
I enjoyed this a lot, and will endeavour to see what other jewels lie in wait.
The creativity in this brings home the need to follow certain lines to the end production, bringing home a memorable visit. Well executed, and well worth reading.
Thank you for sharing.
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Thank you for your heartwarming comments!
I love to learn new things.
Lianonsidhe
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Written very well, the rhyme was fluent and the imagery was fantastic. Totally enjoyable
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Thank you for your lovely words.
Lianonsidhe
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