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The ‘Have Tos’ & the ‘Have Not Tos’

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If never faithful, “unfaithful” never can be.

Trust me on this One.

For an alcoholic

drinking always did have the stink of plague upon it.

Etiquette for dying imbibes group therapy

in the capitol of Austeria.

Chillin’ in the rank recipe,

Contagion Freak is deep.

GUILT:  “Takes a load off” hope Soap Addicts,

contamination’s blissful retiring home for Dope Addicts.

Infectivity,

it’s fragrance is all around us hanging at the end of a rope.

It’s a strange thing,

a performance sold out.

Contagion’s SAT’s

“Let’s Negotiate” is the fiction that addiction’s all about.

It’s the places that we’re found;

Ultimate Concerns, the places that we’re bound. 

Asking God to hold our collective coats

while we write miserable prayers we can’t believe in

Romantic Optimism is the delivery noun for the quintessential reality

of intuition’s unbelievable, unbearable truths.

Eyes and nose water

as we mace our face with thankless foregoneness.

Scandalwood incense

reeks of religion founded on resentment

Instinct for indistinct tapping, Counter-phobic-Rapping

a blind human’s cane just doesn’t care who is listenin’, Dirt Nappin'.

 

Ethereality alone overruns coolest sorrow at the bottom of a dream succumbed

Thermality of stolen mouths blend raindrops

how to beat the Invisible pi (admit you know as much as I don’t)

is a songbook interwoven, where every note, every phrase meticulous is the

Infinite Resignation

is the Not God of every First Step

Author notes

Had so many friends die of alcohol or drug addictions through the years.

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  • Redstormy gold member
    July 27
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    I definately hear ya on this one. The pattern is a bit hard to follow though.
    Our minds must be in the same place.

  • .....

    Got lost on this one. The graphic is powerful.....so much so that I nearly missed, umm, well, it's there, and I eventually did see, umm.....IT.

    Some very interesting lines along with a unique form. The one that painted the best picture in my imagination was

    "Asking God to hold our collective coats while we write miserable prayers we can’t believe in"

    Captures the attention of the reader (well this one, anyway) and leads them on a trip.....makes me think it's a poetic version of Petty & The Heartbreakers "Don't come around here no more."

    Also particulary enjoyed:

    "(admit you know as much as I don’t)"
    "Scandalwood incense"
    "reeks of religion"

    Some clever twists your wit takes.....delights this mind.

    Love & Blessings

    ~ ~ Janet ~ ~

    • Thx Janet

      My friend said it was hard to focus on cuz of the spread. Maybe I should center it. I felt the spread of lines made it frustrating to follow, and would engage the virtue of patience and smack of frustration, much like true alcoholism does. Thanks again! :-)