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A World Broken


Dejected,defeated,misunderstood
Standing stiff,a lifeless wood
Explanations sought
A futile thought
Accusations hurled
Break an entire world
Words angry and curt
Inflicting pain and hurt
Leaving debris of feeling worthless and small
Wishing I had not happened at all

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  • kristy1116
    September 12

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    I can relate to this poem, how I have felt along with people I know. The flow was perfect, drawing me in each line. Continue writing!


  • Edited
    August 3

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    these are pretty darn depressing words, feelings, thoughts. as well hope that they fade into shadows of pluto never to find it's cold feet returning.
    though i hate to say it it is still a good write. a mind in 'defeat' open to be healed.


  • DaWildChild
    July 21

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    POWERFUL

    I can almost feel your pain and the emotion here. beautiful piece of poetry, execellent choice of words short and precise. i enjoyed reading this piece.. thanks very much for sharing this one.

  • mina nagi
    June 21

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    Bon-bon,

    Category: Pain
    OMG... What's happened, why are you feeling so gutted? hope it's not personal, just one of those poetic experiments...

    "Wishing I had not happened at all" ... don't be a fool silly billy... we would have missed out your beautiful poetry... this line has hit the reader the hardest... no doubt this is a very heartwrenching poem, a poem like this coming from you is a rarity ... though beautifully worded... It's the sensitiveness of the human nature that we feel hurt when accused unduly... every line of this poem is oozing pain... this is the most heartfelt poems I've read it on your page...

    Take care... and cheer up... remember there's no tax of smiling

    mina


  • Aun Ali
    June 12

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    Immensful

    From anguish to regret, this poem is so touching, is this the actual feelings of you or just a poem?

    "Dejected, defeated, misunderstood"

    This phrase was the power that played the entire magic. It looks like there is really something that hurts you in your heart.

    The regretful ending is another addition to the anguish hidden in here.


  • Hallie Kavanagh
    June 11

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    "Leaving debris of feeling worthless and small
    Wishing I had not happened at all"
    I really liked the word debris here and the last line is so powerful... such force in such a short piece.
    good work!


  • Mari Goes gold member
    June 10

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    You know that when reading a poem like this one posted by you, I feel like going wherever you are just to give you a big HUG! I hope this isn't a personal personal poem, but something inspired by an 'outside' life.
    You bonita, are too lovely for not have happened

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