I look out over the horizon,
And what do i see?
A small ship,
Sillouted and black against a setting sun,
And a beautiful sky,
Reflecting happiness on the faces it kissed.
But my feelings stay the same
Even if others change.
I still have to live through another day.
The sun sets and night follows.
Will the next day be better?
And then i realise
Looking out over the horizon
Has made me want to see tomorrow,
and what the day might bring.
Author notes
I hope that now i have edited this piece its abit better.
A contest entry
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750 points, ended July 6, 15 entries
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Please point out ways i can improve this. thanks
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BEAUTIFUL!!!!
As one sees such sights as this it seems all that the day brought us in way of sadness is taken away and replace with a new hope for tomorrow.
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very original nd true....I wish u wud have added some more lines though../.
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wow i find this poem quite sweet.... your poems are getting better and better... keep writing...well done!!
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Hmm....
Very interesting thoughts penned here. Seems like you have a very creative mind. Nice one.
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I liked it, but I agree, not the best I think you could deliever. Feel free to edit and msg me if you do so I can re-comment. You have a nice foundation for a great poem!! Thanks for taking the time to enter!!
xx
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