A bullet through the lips
Those words are said too easy
My heartbeat skips
Sing me a fake song.
Cut out your tongue
Let your emotions scream
You're nothing anymore
Disguising this nightmare as a dream.
Spit lies and make them true
Trace the tears in my eyes
"I Love You."
Whisper it again...
I always believe the lies.
Author notes
I found this yesterday on a piece of torn, crumbled up notebook paper. The only word it had written on it, besides the poem, was "Gull". I have no idea how long ago that I wrote it, and I know that it skips around a lot. If you really do not enjoy it, I will remove it, and put something else back in its place.
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Comments
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is it guilt, not gull.? I really do like it.
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Don't replace it! Old poetry is usually the person's best. I liked this one because 1. It had brilliant imagery, 2. I loved it, 3. It had some very spectacular metaphors. Those are my reasons for my love towards it. Dark yet it screams for attention. Nice work.
Dax
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This is a very deep write
With scuh depth you have penned a great poem here . It can take the mind in many different directions as often the mind loves to do and you leave a picture for the readers of someone feeling lost and in pain and so wanting to hear the words I love you even though it may be a lie you must hear them once again .Bravo
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i dont think it skips. I actually really enjoyed it. It was bittersweet but beautiful. Thanks for sharing a bit of your soul, and thanks for the prewrite.
Rose
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