when shades had been pulled
to mark the end of day
in ebbing light, rise of night
when thoughts can encircle us
in the cycle of things done and not
I saw a shadow of a faded wish
glimpsed eye, dark corner
and window panes came in a glow
when I had forgotten
how full and beautiful the moon can be
how it felt to glide upon a silver beam
watching bare trees suddenly become full
and a song that fills the part of me
that was simply waiting for the stars
In a list
A contest entry
- Love of my life - Santana w/ Dave Matthews by poet2angels.
700 points, ended June 11, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Absolutely exquisite. So very very pleased to see gold on this gem. You took this contest prompt above and beyond. Bravo dear soul.
~Pamela 
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Thank you Pamela-
it is one of my fav songs, two of my favorite artists... so the stars were aligned for an inspiration...
...PK
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This leaves me without words to comment and do you justice. I actually felt myself sighing as I read this. Your last line just made me melt. Bravo!!
Stacy
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Thank you Stacy-
for reading and for your lovely comments...PK
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Ah, the silver beam
making full the trees,
as the mind set free
imagines possibilities.
You brighten the shadows, PK.
M-C
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Thank you so much M-C -
your rhymes are splendid... PK
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Ah that song!!! as you know I'm a big fan of DMB and Santana, having the two together playing that song is like listening to sound of heaven
Loved how you saw that Love of my life...
Playing the song now to feel your poem better.
Just like Dave's voice sounds as if his tongue were Santana's guitar strings, your words are perfected entwined with the rhythm of that song.
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Thank you Mari -
Yes, it is a brilliant performance, two great ones doing what they do best...I think the song is a little unusual for the depth of the lyrics; wonderful phrases but that also make one pause and think... Thanks for all ... h
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This is beautiful, PK, a stunning pause.
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Thanks.. Mercedes...PK
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Very well said, I have to remember to stop and just be, not think so much. Simplistically altered to a single sense, and just breathe. Thank you, you're poems are like vitamins to me.
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Thank you Rowan-
i like the way you think... reminds of another fav song : " don't change a hair for me..."...PK
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This is gorgeous and brings a sigh...
Wow I was so relaxed reading it that I felt like I was in a boat with a special someone just gazing at that moon you describe...
Thank you for taking my imagination away somewhere beautiful
Lynda
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Your lines about forgetting how beautiful the moon can be reminded me of the movie with Tom Hanks & Meg Ryan, "Joe vs. the Volcano", when he's on the ocean, dehydrated, & has the sudden revelation that life is larger than his petty problems, that it truly is worth striving to survive. A lovely take on the prompt, Poet Man. Good luck in Lynda's contest.
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yes Wanda-
I remember it well, huge sight...the moon over the equator; I have had a few reminders...it is truly magnificent, and we need it...for perspective.. so very true...Thanks for all...PK
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