I met you just this evening, but I let you walk me home
It was dark outside, and you wouldn't let me walk alone
When we arrived at my doorstep, I felt really low
And when you embraced my waist, i didn't want to go
Years worth of memories were packed between our chests
as we held on so tightly our blood vessels were compressed
Both of us thinking the same thing, not knowing when to part
and when i stole that kiss, that was definatley the start
A contest entry
- Make Me Feel Baby by KelsBabez.
700 points, ended June 10, 45 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Constructive critism guys?
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tightly our blood vessels were compressed
ya know when im close with someone and our bodies are close together or were holding hands i always kinda imagined like your pulse compressing with someones elses, like there so close there competing xD
great write sis
ive missed ya -
COo0Oo0Oo0Oo0OL
vERII lovey dovey....has it happened 2 u be4?
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It was nice,
the background was bright
so it made it a little hard to read
good luck,
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