lovesick lullaby
tucked away
in Teddy Bear's tummy
love is stuffed
with a key
childlike, tender melody
once wound too tightly
a small bitter fight
cannot unwind
her broken melody
soft toys and singing hearts
now... just broken parts
Author notes
Word Prompt:
"Her Broken Melody"
12 lines
A contest entry
- Quickie! by T.o.r.t.u.r.e..
575 points, ended June 10, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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childlike, tender melody
once wound too tightly
a small bitter fight
cannot unwind
her broken melody
So beautiful lass..
Had a music box sort of feel...
Fragile and soft....
yet i felt great sadness from
the title and tone.
A moving and poetic piece of art.
Bless your heart
little gypsy,
Liam
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Sad - could represent entrophy of the Universe
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gotta say
This is as charming as it is concise, yet menaigful all along
I favoured the beginning at first, but as I kept reading I found that the character of the poem as a whole deserves equal applause.
Yet I am afraid I haven't captured the whole idea,hell I might have not captured it at all, but what I saw delighted me, there's a sadness and an experience entertwined gracefully together, and truly,
it's all I need to understand.
Very good penning,
dear poet
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Awwww........Thank you so much Eyeraven!
Coming from you it is a compliment indeed! Thank you so much for reading and leaving such a wonderful thoughtful comment!
I will be by to read some of yours!
Annette
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I really like this verse.
~~childlike, tender melody
once wound too tightly
a small bitter fight
cannot unwind
her broken melody~
Lots of meaning in that.
Joe
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