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Magpies

Magpies haunt me.

Stealing me away
in pieces,

Aware of time
Spent
Passing

I'm always

aware of time
Spent
Passing

Little reminders
of little left.

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  • LionessK silver member
    June 11
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    welcome to allpoetry

    "Stealing me away
    in pieces"
    That stood out to me. I like the way you let your thoughts flow here. It does add something more. You have a well written, thought provoking write here. Yes, I would say you have talent. Thank you for sharing it with us all.

    Enjoy the site.



  • stepbystep
    June 8

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    My novel of wisdom haha;

    Another in depth poem, which is hard for some people to grasp. This is one of them where you have to read it slowly to get the full effect.

    To myself, it's got sort of a mysterious-dark feeling to it.

    'I'm always aware of time Spent Passing'.

    love that line. (:

    Another work of art, Piccaso.

    • dr scribe
      June 8
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      Ah yes, I wrote it that way so it would be read slowly It was a poignant, present moment and yes, mysterious and dark in some ways, I guess. Thank you.

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