Silent songs fill frigid space,
A voice lingers with touches of lace,
Ringing sounds without motion stand,
What life left if no one’s there,
Just ice and air to smile for ancient sands.
A contest entry
- How much can you say in just a few lines? by reckless abandon.
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I reallly like the rhyme in this one, good job and thanks for entering
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Haha it kinda sounds like something I'd write. I see this is for a contest, fits it brilliantly.
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thanks. ^^
really? maybe you're rubbing off on me lol
I wrote this last semester sometime.
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Gooooood!
Jamie, this is one of the ones where I wanna re-read and re-read! Bravo!
Right here, "What life left for no one’s there"
I think it would flow a bit better if you put "What life's left for no one’s there," OR
"What life's left, for no one’s there,"
Other than that, Im gonna go read it again....NOW! !
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I changed it, go see.
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Sorry I meant poem
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I was just wondering if this song was about the band "Muse"?
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has nothing to do with them. ^^
however, I do like that band
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