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I Am Dead

I AM

s  l  o  w  l  y   
               
                    dying

I AM


f
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e
l
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g

                    pain


I AM


w
  i
    s
      h
        i
      n
      g

                  there was hope



I AM


f
a
d
i
n
g


                away



I AM


s    t    i    l    l        a    l    i    v    e
t    r    g    i    y        w    o          i    n
a    y    n    v    i        a    v    f    s    o
y    i    o    i    n        k    i    e    i    u
i    n    r    n    g        e    n    e    b    g
n    g    i    g                    g    l    l    h
g          g          a        l                e    !  i'm
      t          t    b        i    h    t              dead
h    o    y    o    o        k    i    o    r
e          o    d    u        e    m    o    i
r    f    u    a    t                          g
e    i          y              y                h
      t                m        o                t
                        e        u               
      i
      n

Author notes

i kinda got carried away in this one...............

A contest entry

wellllllll......... it was saposed to be dirty pretty so...........?

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Comments

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  • beautiful.obsession
    June 26
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    wow. awesome ending! loved it


  • emmaline2310
    June 9
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    i liked the way you wrote it. great job.


  • Fallen-Thumper
    June 9

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    really liked it and i loved the way it was layed out, really good and i dont think that you got carried away. Really well written.


  • Beverlynohime
    June 9

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    This is VERY creative. I like it. I got everything that I was supposed to get within this poem. Love how you did the ending. It was BRILLIANT!


  • Heva Feva
    June 8

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    I really like how you did the acrostic poem at the bottom, that was quite cool. Maybe add more effects, instead of just using the verticle and hortizontal words. I liked it. Good luck and thanks for entering my contest.
    -heva

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