Regretting to dive in this well
Here I watch the sky
The same blue, the same lie
That I attempt to dispel
The depths of hostility
Panacea by seclusion
Yet I am longing for your affection
Beneath such graspable liberty
Oh sweet skies, your eyes.
Hold my emotions no longer
In your light I cannot ponder
Allow me to walk on this earth
What did you think
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Wow, i can see already you have a talent for this, very well written piece, and the flow was smooth:]
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Welcome to AllPoetry!
This is a lovely write, and I adore your rhyme scheme!
The only thing I would recommend is adding some punctuation
Well done on a great start
I hope that you come to enjoy this site as much as I do, and if you have any questions please don't hesitate to ask me!!
Best of luck with your future writing,
Maria
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