Throw open the window,
Let the staleness out
Let the night air tighten
her steely grip around your neck.
its not as you’d imagine-
to throw open such wonder
and grow fainter after capture
to taste love’s kiss,
and paler still, fade away
to death, to change-
And wonderment-
What did you think of this poem generally speaking? Do I have talent?
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awesome imagery
such depth of metaphor .. abstract enough
also ... very good wrie indeed
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Thank you so much teddybare! Much appreciated!
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Let the night air tighten
her steely grip around your neck.
^^^Gahhh, and you say I write honestly and truthfully?
Girl, from the looks of this poem, you have so much talent yet to be unleashed. This packs a punch to anyone who reads it, and it provides astounding detail and metaphors. At least, thats how I view it.
You need to be published.
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Aww thank you! So sweet!
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you're soo welcome!
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this has a passion in it
a fire, the path it takes you on is not expected
turns into an amazement of life
such awe
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You have so much talent! This is wonderful!
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