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Best of Me

My children are the best of me, their innocence divine
My heart explodes with satisfaction knowing they are mine
They make up my foundation, the things that make me whole
From now until forever they’re fundamental to my soul

They’re the universes masterpiece, the stars within my eyes
The epitome of purity and all that it implies
Honesty has no boundaries, they’re accepting, and sincere
Their love is pure of the heart, it knows not how to fear

My children are the best of me, I hold their love on high
Part of me for eternity, as endless as the sky
Comfort overwhelms me with their soft embrace
Admiration engulfs me with the kindness of their face

The longing for their happiness is an overwhelming force
I have to do my best to guide them through life’s course
They see life as an adventure waiting to take place
I’ll stand behind them through all of time and space.

 

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This is a dedication to my babies, a simple poem just doesn't do them justice. They are my universe!

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  • Coathanger
    July 11
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    Very wise words that any parent feels in every living moment. Beautifully captured in verse.


  • GoliathAssassin
    June 29

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    Sweet

    Kids really are where it's at. I often wish I had some of my own. Becareful what they learn while "growing up." It's not all about keeping them safe from horrible things.

    "Honesty has no boundaries, they’re accepting, and sincere
    Their love is pure of the heart, it knows not how to fear"

    It's about making sure they don't fall into the more common traps of our society also. Of course, they won't always be this pure, and that must be hard to think about... but if you love purity, you've got what it takes to teach them about it.


  • Ted E Bare gold member
    June 15

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    I think it's a very beautiful poem and illustrates pure love as a parent. I'm one myself and you would and will do anything for your child(ren). Even though you say a simple poem doesn't do them justice, I feel that you have even with the three words you used as the title; "Best Of Me." That proves how much your children means to you and that's a blessing to know.

    Ted E


    • MissyYates
      June 27
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      I appreciate your comment more than you could know! This is deffinately one of my favoreite pieces and I'm glad you could feel the love and emotion entwined within its words.


      • Ted E Bare gold member
        June 29
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        You're truly very welcome and I do believe I know (especiaally being a parent of one).

  • poets whisper silver member
    June 11

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    I see nothing to critique and everything to praise. I like the rhyme and some of the phrasing is brilliant. Good job.


  • enlightenedatheist
    June 10
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    wow this was really great i really enjoyed what you wrote. it is very inspiring!

  • all faded blue
    June 10
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    beautiful!


  • Badass Brea
    June 10

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    Beautiful

    Your children are very lucky to have such an adoring mother!

    This was so beautiful, and your children are beautiful as well.

    I love the flow of this, and the rhyming. I hope your kids love your talent when they get older, and hopefully inherit your way with words!

    Again, a beautiful poem!

    exOHex
    Brea

    • MissyYates
      June 27
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      Thank you! I hope they appreciate writing for what it is myself but I'm not getting my hopes up..lol. It's not for everyone after all!

  • Rocking Robert
    June 10

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    Beautifully Written

    Your thoughts flow effortlessly and your love for your kids permeates this poem. Wish I could master the background work you do so well !!!
    I read it and feel the pure love and innocence only a child can bring forth.

  • Bob Fox
    June 9

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    Mom

    Tis a truly wonderful dedication to your lovely children. One day, when they are older, they will hold your ever nearer to their hearts.


  • Miss Macabre silver member
    June 8
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    Amazing! This poem was very beautiful, and it flowed perfectly.

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