I wander temples of the mind
in time I bought and reassigned
to burbling fountains, garden rows
where life renews and water flows.
The past ensnares me with my sin,
excuses lying pale and thin;
a skin of thorns on sculpted rose
where life renews and water flows.
A future stretches out my stars,
betraying Venus, taunting Mars,
beyond the veil of mortal close
where life renews and water flows.
I wander temples of the mind
where life renews and water flows.
Author notes
My first Kyrielle sonnet. Picture prompt was http://allpoetry.com/images/ext/Contest/2448/918.jpg?1244226328
Elements of personality here (rare occurrence).
Word count: 82.
A contest entry
- PIF Picture Prompt - Semiquickie by AliceinPoetryLand.
850 points, ended June 18, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think?
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This is so very beautiful. I keep on going back to that line "Betraying Venus, taunting Mars".
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My compliments on your sonnet...Most attractive, and enhances the picture prompt...Delicately awesome write!
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Forgot to applaud!
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Jaw drops, aghast. My poem is definitely no match for yours, though I'm only 11. If I were AliceinPoetryLand you would've won already, though I didn't read all the entries yet. Best of luck.
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Oh well I am a sucker for this form
And yours is beautifully penned indeed. I love the depth you found in the picture.
Thank you so much for your entry
Gaylene
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I think it was one of your Kyrielle sonnets that inspired me to have a go at this form actually
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Excellently written, though I'm not keen on the lack of rhyme at the end. I see that in most Kyrielle sonnets, so I assume it 'has' to be that way.
Very pretty, too.
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Blah, I'm still here.
I guess...that because the rhyme scheme is either abaB or aabB, and never baaB, you would expect the end not to rhyme, unless the writer made a=b, which would sound awkward.
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Very nice!
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Thanks
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