Watch the pretty fire burn
Don't be frightened
It won't hurt...
Too much
The pain is only the release of your soul
Into the abyss of death
Sit back My love
And watch as I strike the match
As I help you realize the pain you've put me through
You wanted us to be together yet you left me
Well this is my solution
We'll be together in death
Our ashes mixed for eternity
This is better than that thing called marriage
Now we will be together even through death
My love
My heart
Please don't be scared as I drop the match onto the pile of paper and gasoline beneath our feet
Don't struggle against your bonds
It will hurt you more
I have ways of making you incapable of movement
Please don't make me use them
Look into my eyes and see how much I love you
You called me strange and psychotic as the flames nipped at your feet
And seared your legs
Don't cry out my love
the pain is pleasure
Smile with me laugh with me
As we enter our endless time together
One last kiss
As I watch the flames consume you
Feeling them on my skin as well
Until the next life
This far from good bye
Author notes
Written March 17th, 2004
A contest entry
- Darkest & Most Horrific Twisted Writing by hommie-t.
300 points, ended August 21, 2006, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make Me Afraid... by Sle3p.
315 points, ended May 17, 2007, 16 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Into The Fire by Mercury Rising.
600 points, ended May 22, 2007, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Darkness over takes you and me by ur worse nightmare.
450 points, ended May 31, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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nicely done sweet but crazy the way i like them
nightmare xx
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Boy, this is a tad dark and disturbing, too say the least. It was an excellent poem, however, I must say. Best of luck in my contest, and thanks for entering.
David
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wow great job.... too bad now u cant win
Great write!!!!
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wow
scary,nice job in filling the contest needs
i realy like this one!thanks for entering love it!
-maddie
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Nice... beautiful. I love it. Such an image - well done!
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dude... this is really twisted^.^ the theme behind it is awesome and i like how you put the physical pain upon the one you are talking to but the mental upon yourself... good luck^.^
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oooh! ultra creepy!... even though the basic theme is revenge cuz ur gf/bf left u.. i still like it!
Fire is a very powerful element n im glad u made use of it in your poem..
Good job n best of luck! -
whoa I'm very hot and my skin burns!! weird!! but a great poem! You're so great yay!
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i wish some one loved me this much
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powerful, I realy like this one too. Your poems keep getting better and better. I love it, damn good job on this one. seriously, This is amazing. I adore it, like undertone said. josh
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I absolutely adore poems about sadistic and vengeful love. Yours was very well written and very much enjoyed.
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Wow, very powerful write. it was great, dark and sad at the same time. Becaus ei knwo what u mean by this write.. ive had similar. anyways keep it up and good luck in th contest
Much love form the dark side,
Emily
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this poem is choice *\8 and oh yeah reign hehehe hope you enjpoy my insanity
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oOoOOo... very dark and morbid love story here. Nicely done. I really enjoyed reading this. Although you forgot to put the choice number inside your authors comments and also a verification word to insure you had read the rules. Well I hope you will make the changes before the contest ends. Thanks for entering. Keep up the great work and best of luck to you in the contest! Take care.
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Wow, This is really crazy. To love someone like this? I don't get it...I mean, if you REALLY would do something like this or if it is just the intenstiy of the pain that made you write this way. The imagery was great and the story line kept me moving on to the next line. Great job, I did Like this I swear
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Man you sure were in a very grim mood weren't you? Good write. I like the thought of being together ever in death. Kinda spooky... but kool.
Peter/Pedro
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Ooh, very scary. Put a big grin on my face though as right now I could happily do that to someone. I love thought-provoking pieces like this, even bad thoughts!
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wow sounds like a good time to take a leak and run like hell from hell. no love is worth the agony and the ectacy of dying togehter on purpose....and what then after the passing, who would accept two departed souls too soon....heaven has no place for love that is destructive, and Hell has no place for love.....limbo perhaps for a long time until all are judged...what joy in that, to wander the earth amidst the ash trees revisiting old haunts where love once bloomed.....Artis
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Good
Wow! Good poem...enjoyed this.
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